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razorblade New Member
since 2003-04-09
Posts 3 |
Too close to you I feel Left unsure of what is really real… A tear in a wing Starts the spiral down… Too quick to change emotion… Too quick to change devotion… Could have left well enough alone Plunging further down… I thought I thought of everything… So helpless, I… I tried the best I could But even the best bleed… Some times… |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
Welcome to pip!!! Judging from this poem, Im glad you're here! I really like this one, The last line especially, "But even the best bleed sometimes." Great Job! WinterWren |
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BrokenDreams Member
since 2003-02-09
Posts 425In The Clouds |
Welcome to PIP. I like the poem and I hope to see more from you. Jenni You are what you make yourself to be. |
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