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CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2003-03-29 03:11 AM

Just kinda something I wrote in light of the war goign on. Nothing too deep or contraversial, but maybe it'll make you think, or somethin, I dunno.

SOLDIER

In this time where nothing matters
And everyone is the same
Every man against the other
This war, they think, is a game

But nobody seems to laugh
At Soldier’s battle scars
And soon the names of thousands
Will be written upon the stars

Now Soldier’s body is laid to rest
On the solemn battle ground
Family’s hearts and souls cry out
But nobody hears a sound

Soldier was proud to go to war
But he never planned to die

[This message has been edited by CwboyAtHeart (03-29-2003 03:14 AM).]

BrokenDreams
Member

since 2003-02-09

Posts 425
In The Clouds

1 posted 2003-03-29 10:47 AM

This is really good and it did kinda make me think. good write.
Jenn

don't ever let others tell you who you are

NSnaomian
Member

since 2002-07-22

Posts 232
In my troll closet I be

2 posted 2003-03-29 01:17 PM

Hmmm, I like this and it does make ya think, but I think you ended a little fast. Just a thought though. Good nonetheless.
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

3 posted 2003-03-29 06:22 PM

Cody,
This was indeed a very nice piece about the war. I think the simple words and everything made it sound that much better. I loved the last stanza..........great job

Riley

Windows stained with the fog, words written in by a girl.

Tabitha LeAnn
Member

since 2003-03-27

Posts 50
Kansas, USA

4 posted 2003-03-29 08:30 PM

O WOW!!! THIS WAS AN AMAZING POEM AT THE LEAST. I CRYED

MYSELF KNOWING SOLIDERS OVER FIGHTING THIS WAS THE PERFECT POEM TO EXPLAIN IT ALL. I LOVED THIS POEM SO MUCH I HAVE TO HONESTLY SAY THIS WAS ONE OF THE MOST MOVING POEMS I HAVE EVER READ. I THINK ALITTLE MORE LENGTH MIGHT HAVE GOTTEN THE IDEA ACROSS BETTER TO THE ONES WHO COULDN'T REALATE BUT TO THE ONES THAT COULD IT WAS A WONDERFUL POEM. NEVER STOP WRITTING YOU HAVE SO MUCH TALENT!!! I LOOK SO FORWARD TO READING MORE OF YOUR WORK.

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

5 posted 2003-03-30 09:19 PM

good job...it was good it was pimpin

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

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