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StellarChica
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since 2002-07-06
Posts 207
floating down a river...

0 posted 2003-03-28 09:02 PM



I love when you smile
in the light of a
traffic signal
on an empty road
at quarter to two.
The clock in your car
is about five hours slow.
The streetlights reflect
in your eyes when you
glance over at me.
You put on some music
because the silence
got awkward.
That good kind of awkward
that's secretly whispering:
"This could be the start of
something right."
I come to the realization
that I don't know how to
make small talk.
And I come to the realization
that I want you more
than I ever realized.
What they say is true:
You know, all that talk
of butterflies in your stomach
and not being able to
sleep or eat and all you
do is think about that person.
It's all true.
We come to our last
traffic signal
and you smile again.
And when we get to
my house I say:
"Thank you so much."
Not just for the ride
but for making sure that
you smiled at all the
traffic signals.

© Copyright 2003 Erin Reynolds - All Rights Reserved
Dance
Junior Member
since 2003-03-28
Posts 34

1 posted 2003-03-28 09:37 PM


WOW! I love it! It shows alot about you.
Great! Poetry is about wearing your heart on your sleeve!


Lexy
Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
2 posted 2003-03-28 10:19 PM


aww, I loved this, its so ral to life. Its like I was a spy in the back seat...
~Lexy

NSnaomian
Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232
In my troll closet I be
3 posted 2003-03-29 01:01 AM


I agree with the two up there completely! Also I thought it was a great story and a good way to end it.
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

Tabitha LeAnn
Member
since 2003-03-27
Posts 50
Kansas, USA
4 posted 2003-03-29 08:47 PM


THIS WAS SO SWEET!!! IT REALLY MADE MY HEART JUMP .  I THOUGHT IT WAS GREAT HOW YOU CHOOSE SOMETHING FROM YOUR HEART TO RIGHT ABOUT YOU KNOW OUTSIDE OF THE USUALL I MEAN YOU PICKED SOMETHING THAT REALLY MOST OF US OR AT LEAST ME NEVER REALLY NOTICED ABOUT MY SPECIAL SOMEONE BUT I THINK I WILL FROM NOW ON. I LOVED ALSO HOW REALITY BASED YOUR POEM WAS EVEN THOUGH IT GAVE THE EMOTIONS ON THE INSIDE IT STILL KEPT WITH WHAT WAS HAPPENING ON THE OUTSIDE.ANYWAYS THE POINT IS I LOVED THIS POEM IT WAS AN AMAZING PIECE OF WRITTING AND I HAVE NOTHING BUT POSSITIVE THINGS TO SAY ABOUT IT. KEEP WRITTING AND ILL CONTINUE TO LOOK FORWARD TO READING YOUR POEMS!!!
StellarChica
Member
since 2002-07-06
Posts 207
floating down a river...
5 posted 2003-03-30 10:08 PM


Thaaaaank you.
SweetGhettoFlurt
Junior Member
since 2003-03-30
Posts 15
Milw,WI
6 posted 2003-04-02 09:52 AM


This poem wuz really awesome!

*~*SweetGhettoFlurt@aol.com*~*Marie*~*

Kandi
Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
7 posted 2003-04-03 04:04 PM


I just want to say that you did SUCH an amazing job with this poem. I loved it! There is an innocence about new love that I think gets lost b/c people have bad experiences and turn bitter or skeptical. But you've captured it here and perfectly described the rush and excitement just from sitting next to someone special on the drive home.
Awesome job! (hugs!)

The day you were born, you were born free
That is your privilege.

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