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Darkness
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since 2002-10-17
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The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies.

0 posted 2003-03-27 09:52 AM


It could have been,
A cinnamon twist sugar kiss
But instead…
It had to end like this.

Life got too hard?
I know, I understand
I’ve been stressed before
And my depression flames were fanned.

Why does God make life so hard?
And I can’t believe we hail
A being that stands and watches
And always lets us fail.

I’ve hated life before
Now I look back and think
God is no longer close to me
For how far “He” let me sink.

Religion is what’s wrong with this world
It cause only war
Just take a look at the Middle East
You know what? I’m not listening anymore.



[This message has been edited by Darkness (03-27-2003 09:56 AM).]

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wings of the moon
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since 2003-03-27
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1 posted 2003-03-27 11:04 AM


wow! some poem...
you've got my vote for the next book...
this is beautiful and powerful and strong...
yet you still manage to include lovely phrases such as "A cinnamon twist sugar kiss"
well done!!

Tabitha LeAnn
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since 2003-03-27
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Kansas, USA
2 posted 2003-03-27 06:18 PM


Great Poem!!! I thought it was really deep.  I liked it alot. I hope to read more of your work soon!!!
Lindsay
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since 2003-03-26
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South Dakota
3 posted 2003-03-27 09:35 PM


i loved your poem

you have my vote

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4 posted 2003-03-28 12:15 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) The thing so many don't understand about religion is that the one thing we have in common is that we believe in a supernatural being and that we all believe in Him, it's just we call Him by different names! (sad sigh) Don't have to get so personal, this is so very saddening but true, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sam, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Savage Quiescence
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since 2002-07-29
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Wandering
5 posted 2003-03-28 09:50 AM


Very bold! Love the determination. Thanks a lot for the read.

Sky

"Whatever life brings, I've been through everything, but now I'm on my knees again" -Creed

carol
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since 2003-01-25
Posts 624
Florida USA
6 posted 2003-04-12 08:19 PM


good write but I believe in God

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

aaron woodside
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since 2001-09-26
Posts 256

7 posted 2003-04-13 12:41 PM


This gets my vote.  I love speaking and discussing religion.

But you can't blame God for the problems of your life.  God gave us Freewill and allowed us to stand on our own two feet.  She's always there waiting to help us back up, but we have to learn to walk alone.

Think of it this way, Did any of God's chosen have an easy life.  The prophets, Martyrs, even Jesus.  None of them had anything resembling an easy life.  Kinna puts things in perspective doesn't it.

I mean how much would you actually cherish anything, if it was all just given to you.  I really don't like the greater good argument, but it works.  We suffer so that we may learn.  Only then will we be able to find our own personal heaven and enjoy it for all the hard work we have put into it.

You have my vote.

ex animo,
Aaron

IN NOMINE PATRI ET FILII ET SPIRITUS SANCTI

SixtiesChick03
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since 2003-03-27
Posts 49
NV
8 posted 2003-04-13 05:01 PM


I loved This poem! Got my vote.
wvplayernotreally
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since 2002-11-06
Posts 215
yakima wa
9 posted 2003-04-13 06:04 PM


good poem. Something I assume we have all felt once in awhile.  Always love your stuff

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
10 posted 2003-04-20 09:38 AM


Wow!!! This is an awesome poem! Being an athiest myself...I can totally agree with you. And I relate. Very wonderful job. You have my vote!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
11 posted 2003-04-20 09:37 PM


You have my vote! I really like this and can totally connect with what you're saying. I feel you're right in many ways. Great job! ~Jess

"The reason I talk to myself is that I'm the only one whose answers I accept."

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