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Trouble Breathing
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since 2002-11-12
Posts 63


0 posted 2003-03-26 05:49 PM



Locked up,
Messed up,
In a cage,
A prisoner to my rage

Suicidal tendencies
Are few and far between
The smell of my rotting conscience,
Would bring a tear to the eyes that have seen it all

I'm sick of feeling like a chump
To down to pick myself back up
I just don’t give a damn, I’m sick of waiting
The pain I keep inside is never fading

I gave it all to lose it all
For every step I take,
I stumble and I fall,
Just to dead inside to care at all

They said just tough it out,
Just find a way
Just go another day,
It’s easy for them to say

© Copyright 2003 Trouble Breathing - All Rights Reserved
Mistletoe Angel
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Posts 32816
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1 posted 2003-03-26 11:51 PM




(big hugggsssssss) You're right...it is easy for them to say...but that is also just the way it is...no matter how cliche or mundane that sounds! (sad sigh) So my only advice to you with utmost sincerity is to move on, sometimes we give it all and are fooled, but at least you get to see everything and out of it you will gain much more understanding and more will sympathize with you and give you what you need, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Tabitha LeAnn
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since 2003-03-27
Posts 50
Kansas, USA
2 posted 2003-03-27 06:24 PM


Wow!! I really related to this poem (that doesn't happen to me alot).  It was amazing and so deep. It sounds like alot of thought and feeling went into this poem. You have my complete vote for our next book!!! I hope to read more of your writtings soon!!!  
BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
3 posted 2003-03-28 09:23 PM


I can definetly relate to this. A lot. It captures the feelings I've been trying to put on paper for some time now. I really love this, and it has my vote.
Jenn

don't ever let others tell you who you are

NSnaomian
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since 2002-07-22
Posts 232
In my troll closet I be
4 posted 2003-03-29 01:03 AM


I know exactly what is going on in here and I want to say two things...*Hugs* (well actually just want to say one) I hope you get through this, everything will be alright.
This is sooo true and I love how you went about it. Very well done.
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
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5 posted 2003-03-29 11:29 AM


This is a very good book submission. I
think a lot of people could relate to it.
Heart Hugs,
Ethel

MissKlarmic
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since 2003-02-20
Posts 70
Canada,N.S
6 posted 2003-03-29 07:45 PM


nice write u get my vote
Lindsay
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since 2003-03-26
Posts 59
South Dakota
7 posted 2003-03-29 10:12 PM


nice poem

i think it had good rhyme and flow

you have my vote

keep up the good work!

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