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Trouble Breathing
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0 posted 2003-03-26 01:49 PM


Never felt this numb before
One thing leads to another
Curled up and shaking on the bedroom floor,
Trying to find something that is real

Numbness is all I feel now,
Searching for that last piece of reality
Grasping for straws,
Or anything that wont break and fall to pieces

Caught up in my unclear emotions,
Not sure what is fake or what is mine,
I’ve lost all control,
All I need is something to help me feel these emotions of which you speak

I spend weeks not being happy,
Not being sad,
I long for these human emotions you all seem to feel,
Just give me something that is real


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Jenn Cirrincione
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1 posted 2003-03-26 09:51 PM


Be careful what you wish for- it just may happen. You don't seem to get that once the flood gates open, sometimes it's so tough to close. I wish you luck, and you have my vote.

Jenn

"Now I'm convinced that he's heaven sent, and must be out of his mind- mama he's crazy, crazy over me."

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2003-03-26 11:41 PM




(big hugggsssssss) The time will come, believe me, and when it does your soul will be satisfied with which you beseech! (sigh) This is a very sincere write, I wish you the best on this excursion as patience offers the best things, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Justbleu
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3 posted 2003-05-08 10:13 AM


Numbness isn't a feeling indeed!!!!
Very good poem!!!
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


blueyedlioness
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4 posted 2003-05-08 12:23 PM


That reminded me so much of one of my friends, I went to look at your profile to see if it was. Lol.

But anyway, awesome portrayal of when you've been hurt so much it just stops hurting. And it'll get better... I promise.


snoduck
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5 posted 2003-05-08 02:58 PM


well... all i can really say is wow. it's a great poem that hits really close to home.  thanks for sharing!

-Erica-

SilentTears
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6 posted 2003-05-10 12:22 PM


This is a very good poem. The only thing that confused me was...you had a rhyme scheme in the first and last stanzas, but not the middle two. Other than that...great job! I relate! You got my vote!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

WinterWren
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7 posted 2003-05-10 02:02 AM


Excellent poem, I can relate very well.
My vote for this one.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

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