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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2003-03-23 08:14 PM

Broken in the reeds
Desperation written on your hands
The silence is deadly
Water lapping against the sand
The rocky bottom
Unmortared foundation
Leaves sink
Wind breaks the surface
Stirring up the silt
Puzzlement stamped on every motion
Of your abuse
Maybe you’ll wake up
Sun sets upon you
Crumbling
Discouraged in love
Decay on my heart
Rotten to the core
Never clean
Always unclean in your hands
The water ripples in this future
Undone by my thoughts
Useless in your arms
Love bears no meaning
Falling deeper
Sinking faster
This is the dead weight of caring

"Despite all my rage I am still just a rat in a cage, Then someone will say what is lost can never be saved"
-Smashing Pumpkins

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2003-03-24 01:46 PM

(big hugggsssss) Oh Regina, this is such a heartaching poem, dearest friend, love should never feel like a dead weight and I hope now your deserving heart has that grace as light as a feather in the spring breeze! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Regina, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

PoeTik JusTice
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 186
California, USA

2 posted 2003-03-24 01:52 PM

Such a sad poem.

I did really enjoy it though.

Good work!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
*~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

pearl6884
Member

since 2003-03-23

Posts 72
California coast

3 posted 2003-03-25 01:09 PM

This is really beautiful. Thank you. *applause* I won't let myself vote for just any poem, but this one deserved it.

*To see the world in a grain of sand, and heaven in a wild flower...Hold infinity in the palm of your hand and eternity in an hour...*
-Blake

Poet on Acid
Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 325
Florida, USA

4 posted 2003-03-25 07:22 PM

This is really great, especially with the mood I'm in now. Great imagery. I doubt it was spawned from the same kinda feeling I have about love at the moment, however, I still identify with it. It's great.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2003-03-27 12:30 PM

God this is beautiful writing, of a harrowing situation.

carol
Senior Member

since 2003-01-25

Posts 624
Florida USA

6 posted 2003-04-13 10:14 PM

Good write but so sad

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

SilentTears
Member

since 2003-02-15

Posts 371
Lost and Broken

7 posted 2003-04-14 05:42 PM

Very, very nice job! You had great imagery...You have my vote!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

Skyfire

Member Elite

since 2000-12-27

Posts 3381
Riding

8 posted 2003-04-14 06:53 PM

Beautiful writing hon

Life may be hard, but it's your attitude that determines your happieness

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