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Street Poet
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since 2002-07-07
Posts 82


0 posted 2003-03-22 04:57 PM



Your mission is complete
My heart is broken and my soul is depleted
How can you do this to me, remember you said you loved me
How we used to hang out and you used to hug me
You broke my heart, it can never be repaired
You got me feeling depressed and scared
I ain't gon lie I still think about you everyday
How could a friendship so right, go so wrong
How could you leave your bestfriend here all alone
You know you out of line
But that's ok because there won't be a next time
Your the only girl I ever had feelings for
Now I feel like you don't want me no more
I was the bestfriend that treated you better than your boyfriends
Now I'm sitting here sad with paper and a pen
I never thought that I would be writing this poem
I never though there would be a day
I wouldn't here your voice on the other end of that phone
I hate to say it, but I miss you
But my heart is broken
So its only right for me to diss you
All I ever wanted was to hug and kiss you
But you've broken my heart and shattered my world
I just wanna know how could you do this girl
You was my air, but now I'm choking
I guess this is what it feels like when your heart is broken


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Denea Furr
Junior Member
since 2002-11-03
Posts 31
Indiana
1 posted 2003-03-22 05:02 PM


deep. i feel for you.

"What a tangled web we weave, when we practice to decieve."

BabieDoll
Member
since 2003-02-13
Posts 268
BFE
2 posted 2003-03-23 02:37 PM


I don't recall reading any of your other work...but this was VERY good! I especially liked the first 2 lines:
Your mission is complete
My heart is broken and my soul is depleted
I applaud you!

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

Albino_Jenn
Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 105
Ontario, Canada
3 posted 2003-03-23 05:54 PM


Oh my goodness this is sooo sad..and so heart felt...you definately have a kind and loving heart, one which deserves someone special that realizes what a great person you are...Great poem....
Jenn

**Hope is what Shields us from the harsh realities of life**

CSwtThng
Member
since 1999-07-28
Posts 124

4 posted 2003-03-23 11:11 PM


Very good poem! I really enjoyed it.
Rapscallion
New Member
since 2003-03-24
Posts 7

5 posted 2003-03-24 07:13 PM


I too enjoyed that poem of yours. Is it fictional or based on your life? I hate to do this to you, actually I relish it , but the type of things you describe in your poem only get worse as you go through life. It sucks, but there it is.
Hevnlyfoxy
Junior Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 10
NYC, NY
6 posted 2003-03-24 11:39 PM


i really like the style in your writing..finally some street poetry !!! Now let me look up a search for more of your poems : )
I hope there aren't anymore sad ones : (

Hevnlyfoxy
Junior Member
since 2003-03-16
Posts 10
NYC, NY
7 posted 2003-03-24 11:40 PM


I just looked up the search and found only this poem...Hopefully you will write more-
pearl6884
Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 72
California coast
8 posted 2003-03-25 12:07 PM


Good poem...Enjoyed the story-like qualities. *applause*

*To see the world in a grain of sand, and heaven in a wild flower...Hold infinity in the palm of your hand and eternity in an hour...*
-Blake

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