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CwboyAtHeart
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Selah, WA, USA

0 posted 2003-03-17 06:35 PM


Hey!  I wrote this the other day.  Not sure where the inspiration came from, but I think it's one of my better poems I've written lately.  Let me know what you think!  


COFFEEHOUSE

As he picked up his guitar
And he took the stage
On his face he had a smile
But his heart began to rage

While he sang his song
He caught her eye
She took each word to heart
And felt like she could fly

After his set they all applauded
She knew she had to meet this man
And this night, she felt
Was where the rest of her life began

Chorus 1:
"I felt when you were singing
Those words came right to me
But I must admit, this coffeehouse thing
Is not my cup of tea"

They sat down at a table
Talked for an hour or more
There was no way of knowing
What their future had in store

Chorus 2:
"To walk up and talk to a stranger
Is not at all like me
And I must admit, this coffeehouse thing
Is not my cup of tea"

Repeat Chorus 1

Repeat Chorus 2

Repeat Verse 1


      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  

[This message has been edited by CwboyAtHeart (03-17-2003 09:31 PM).]

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Mistletoe Angel
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1 posted 2003-03-17 08:58 PM






(sigh) Oh Cody, this would make a great rock ballad, sweet friend, I can imagine this recorded as I hope soon you get this recorded up on MP3 format so we can all listen to it! (big hugggssssssss) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Cody, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

chasing rain
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since 2001-05-15
Posts 737
Canada
2 posted 2003-03-17 09:28 PM


CwboyAtHeart-

Awesome stuff here! It would make a great song. There were a bit of places where the flow seemed to go off track, but it was good, nonetheless. It reminded me of this scene in Nick Bantock's "The Forgetting Room" where Armon's grandfather's friend's wife (whew!) was recounting how he and his wife (Armon's grandfather and grandmother) met. Except she was reading poetry and not singing. Well, anyway, I really liked this one! Keep it up!

Leah
BrokenDreams
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In The Clouds
3 posted 2003-03-17 10:26 PM


I agree, this would make an awesome song.

Jenn

don't ever let others tell you who you are

kaile
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4 posted 2003-03-18 10:01 AM


came peeking because the title spoke to me and was glad i did...
PoeTik JusTice
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since 2003-01-05
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5 posted 2003-03-18 12:17 PM


Great work! It's sounds like it would be an awesome song! Nice job!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
     *~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn, is to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

Alicethruglass
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6 posted 2003-03-23 05:43 PM


I remember the days of the coffeehouses ..
*s
~A~

Albino_Jenn
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since 2003-03-03
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7 posted 2003-03-23 05:50 PM


This would make an awesome song, you seem like you have a beautiful heart, and a kind soul!! The kind of person that realizes the beauty of life!! Great job!!!
Jenn

**Hope is what Shields us from the harsh realities of life**

Justbleu
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8 posted 2003-04-17 09:18 AM


This is really good.....
Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again.  To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown


SilentTears
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9 posted 2003-04-19 03:47 PM


Oh, this is just absolutely beautiful. "But I'll have to admit, this coffeehouse thing, is not my cup of tea." I really like how you worded that line! This was wonderful! You have my vote!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

karebear07
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10 posted 2003-04-19 06:34 PM


That would make an awesome song
          -Kara <><

tornskirt
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11 posted 2003-04-19 06:49 PM


that was wonderful! i enjoyed every line of it. you got my vote

never leave the light on if you don't want to be found

*Dark Princess*
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lost in the shadows
12 posted 2003-04-27 12:21 PM


Don't know how I missed this one, but I really liked it...kinda reminds me of past times...Had to vote for it...Keep up the good work
punkrockerrobin
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13 posted 2003-04-27 02:38 AM


how cute!!! i love coffee house concerts!
robin

i am who i am and that's all that i am and all i shall ever be and if you don't like who i am then leave!

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