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Forever Forsaken
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Forever Forsaken |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
Let down... Left behind.. In this cold, dried up world. No comfort... No warmth.. Forgotton about today, tomorrow...forever. Everything = Lies... Everyone = Mistrust.. Deceit can laugh...and smile. No sleep... No love.. Tormented daily by everything around me. Once again- No comfort will come forth- To me. Once again- Left behind by all those around- ..Forever Forsaken.. If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain. |
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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
you have a nice flow. I enjoyed this, I liked the format as well. You have a nice style, I like almost everything I read from you. Keep it comming. Lex |
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Kandi Member
since 2000-06-14
Posts 354North of Hell |
I agree with Lexy - I think the flow to your poetry is its strongest point, and the format is helpful. You express yourself so vividly. Excellent work. I'm starting to recognize your name as one of my favorite writers around here.  ~Kay Just wanna be funny,looks like the joke's on me. |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
first off, i really liked the style this has been written in. my favorite part was quote: that is so true.......but i think the title gave away the ending. because they were the same. i would rethink the title but otherwise this was very nice.... loved it, riley *the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time* |
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T-Bird Junior Member
since 2003-07-02
Posts 17Washington, United States |
I really enjoyed how powerful it was. I also like the way u had it layed out. |
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