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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
Somethings closing in with crushing grip. A feeling I can't identify. Out of the dark, out of the blue, the pulsing emptiness came unexplainable emotion. Maybe it came with the feel of your finger tips on my skin, or my want to be wanted, but whatever it is, I feel like you've made me, you've created something out of nothing. I'll hope its a passing phase, cause your too good for me, I'm so scared about the world, so insecure. You stand on solid ground, always so sure. I don't deserve you. Just don't, please don't touch me. Out of the darkness came light, creating shaddows. Confused denisty. Uncertain motives. Somethings closing in, as I'm breaking up inside. desert sand, and winter ice, combine.. confusing the natural forces. All I know is nothing makes sence, since your finger tips first touched my skin. |
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NSnaomian Member
since 2002-07-22
Posts 232In my troll closet I be |
Very well done. I love the images I get from this, the winter and desert sand colliding..wow  Maybe its just my imagination  Who knows... Very good though, I loved it! Laura "All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life." |
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Trapped New Member
since 2003-03-13
Posts 4Florida |
The poem was really good and it really does send the images to your head as Laura had said. Great job! Joel |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Lexy~ This is a nicely written piece. You've included some good imagery here and I enjoyed the read. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Albino_Jenn Member
since 2003-03-03
Posts 105Ontario, Canada |
Great job..it the words you used really bring the poem to life..I liked this poem alot..good job!!!! Jenn **Hope is what Shields us from the harsh realities of life** |
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