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Trouble Breathing
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since 2002-11-12
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0 posted 2003-03-09 04:37 AM


I've been going through a rough time, with my girlfriend being in the hospital and all..and that's kind of where this poem came from. Its brand new..I havent had time to critique yet, so ill be making some changes.


I'm praying for you to get better,
I need you in my life,
You're getting the help you need now,
I just hope it helps you fight

You'll never imagine my fright,
When I first heard about your news,
But heart skipped a few beats,
And I instantly knew things couldnt be worse

Ive come to realize,
You're getting the help you needed all along,
Things can only get better from here,
But I still miss you

This won't be easy on us both,
But im praying for your sake,
I want you to be you again,
I cant stand seeing you in this state

Take all the time you need,
Ill learn to deal without you,
Hopefully I'll talk to you again soon,
Until then, I dont know what I'll do

I'll find a way to deal,
It won't be easy for me either,
I guess I'm just being selfish,
Until I see you again, Being sad is all I have to offer.

[This message has been edited by Trouble Breathing (03-09-2003 04:37 AM).]

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frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
Posts 268
my own special world
1 posted 2003-03-09 07:35 AM


Nice poem, I really liked it.  I hope everything works out and she gets better soon

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
2 posted 2003-03-09 01:34 PM



Trouble Breathing~
There is a lot of emotion in this piece,
and you've expressed it well.
I wish you and your boyfriend the best,
and I hope things works out well for you both.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Mistletoe Angel
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3 posted 2003-03-09 03:53 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh dear, my heart goes out to you, sweet friend, I am so sorry to hear this news and I pray very soon your girlfriend heals and she can again be with you as you are a very compassionae and loving friend she is so lucky to have! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, you have my vote and angel hugs, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

carol
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since 2003-01-25
Posts 624
Florida USA
4 posted 2003-04-19 10:53 PM


Very sad but with a friend like you and your prayers will help her I will be praying for both of you this sure gets my vote

Real friends celebrate in who we are and have faith in all that we can become
Lots of Love
Rita

SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
5 posted 2003-04-19 11:22 PM


AWW!! This poem is so sad!! It's very good, though. Don't worry...everything has a way of working itself out!! She'll be fine, hunnie, don't you worry!! Beautiful write!

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

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