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Ina
Senior Member

since 2000-10-09

Posts 1236
Quebec, Canada

0 posted 2003-03-08 04:20 PM

FALLING

The discouragement of fufillment
an emptiness of your heart
a thought banished within our space
the unfortunated shacks that we visit
nothing physical
it's all up here
the slender disuasion
it's not very important
the waves break upon Tortuego isle
it doesn't mean that everything is alright
walk down the road
let's go visit Quepos
a microscopic feeling
its not beautiful and its not horrendus
it sways and it tumbles
forget the scenery
it all beats it our minds
we crumble and we fall
the clouds shower upon us
and we try to get up
the heart of the matter
there is none
slowly wasting away on my hammock
the heat spreads away
the vision of deserted islands
i tumble and i fall
and hopefully this aching
will follow.

Regina 2003

"heaven truley knows that thou art false as hell...one that loved not wisely,but too well..she swore..'twas a strange ,'twas passing strange"-othello

Android 17

Senior Member

since 2001-07-21

Posts 664
Winnipeg

1 posted 2003-03-10 07:07 PM

*nods* Interesting---this brought very vivid imagery to my mind. I liked it...*nods* This isn't my favourite by you, but it's enough to clap about. Hehe, anyways---I can see it's inspiration; and general message. Hang in there, okay?

Vekrdehk fyc dra uhmo drehk E fyc kuut yd...pid, yd maycd E ymfyoc vuikrd vun fryd E pameajat eh...

Isabel Galaxia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-18

Posts 733

2 posted 2003-03-12 10:07 PM

Wow..
That one was a bit confusing..great though..and maybe if I was in a more..conscious state of mind I could further comment...alas...I am not..
Bel

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

3 posted 2003-03-18 02:10 AM

Ina~
Your poetry always has a certain depth about it
that I enjoy...it gets my mind's attention.
This piece is no exception.
Nicely done.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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