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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2003-03-07 04:54 PM


I'm going
I'm going
To a place unknown.

So much fear (I'm scared)
So much fear
That I want the clock
To stop
And live on present...forever.

I'm going
I'm going
But I'm afraid (I'm scared)
That my lamp that
Taking care of my soul
Will go dim,
Dimmer, and dimmer each day.

Faith (what it is?)
Faith (where it's from?)
Would I...
Ever find it...

I'm going
I'm going
But I'm lack of faith (I fear...)
I fear that
I've to stand alone.
So alone that I cry...

Cry... (what a tear is worth?)
Cry... (does anybody care?)
Care about somebody outside their folks,
Nuture her out of their needs...

I'm going
I'm going
But I'm nobody without my folks. (I'm a nobody)
A nobody outside my shelter...
I'm frighten that
That someday I need to stand...
Stand alone, depend on no one else...

Stand...
Stand alone...


~Every girl has a dream within.

[This message has been edited by aries_luv_ppl (03-07-2003 04:55 PM).]

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frolicking dolphin
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since 2003-02-23
Posts 268
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1 posted 2003-03-07 05:38 PM


Other than a few minor spelling mistakes that was great   It was very sad and touching  My favorite lines were
"I'm frighten that
That someday I need to stand...
Stand alone, depend on no one else..."

Those lines I though were really well written and very thoughtful
Good write and read

~*~Karen~*~

~Dream like you'll live forever,live like you'll die tomorrow~

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