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Triskaidekaphobia
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since 2003-02-05
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In a state of disrepair...

0 posted 2003-03-03 10:34 PM



You ask again how I feel.
How I feel?

I feel that..

You are clothed in false human kindness
that looks exceptional and edible
but one small taste reveals a bitterness
that fills the lungs and stomach
like the old remnants of vomit
which makes me gag in reflex
scramble back gasping for air
unable to tell if I manage a breath
or die choking and spluttering
in an undeniable flood of my own bile.

That is how I feel.

If you did not want to hear the answer
you should not have asked the question

There should be a psychology of feet. For do we not make decisions with our legs and walk about on our brains? What do you mean "No, not really"?

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1 posted 2003-03-04 06:47 PM


Hmmm....sounds like you're experiencing technical difficulties with life. I hope things get better. Good luck.
i thought the poem was fine, full of bitterness and angst, but fine nonetheless. We need more angry poems all the lovy dovy stuff is making my mind collapse upon itself.


-j-

Look at the sun and burn your eyes. You'll be fine in the end.

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