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Lexy Senior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038California |
I need someplace to rest my head, someplace at all to lift the load of the day. Someplace to fall away. Never, never land, is a land I'll never find. So I'll drift through the foggy days, my head up in the clouds, my blank and lonely stare. My cold and empty nights. I need someone to feel my skin, to mend this ache, that never ends. I fall within, to my dreams and fanaties, I live my life, shun reality. Harsh colors, I choose not to see. Its now I rest my head, and fall away. And pray to make it through this dawning day. |
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AngelShell Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 446not heaven nor hell so... |
I really, really liked the first three lines, I thought it opened up the piece nicely and gave a good link to the title without shoving it obviously in your face. Well done. ~I haven't memorized all of the cute things to say but I'm working on it~ |
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Triskaidekaphobia Member
since 2003-02-05
Posts 251In a state of disrepair... |
Very interesting work! Love to see some more so get writting There should be a psychology of feet. For do we not make decisions with our legs and walk about on our brains? What do you mean "No, not really"? |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
Good work, definitely enjoyed it! XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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frolicking dolphin Member
since 2003-02-23
Posts 268my own special world |
very nice poem, can't wait to read your next poem ~*~Karen~*~ |
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