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BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds

0 posted 2003-02-16 06:08 PM


Am I in love with you?
or just the memories you left
lingering on my lips?
Only we knew the love
we shared  that night.
I know you felt it;
I could see it in your eyes
The gentle touch, the soft embrace.
Was it real?
Or just a feverish dream?
Whatever it was, the memory is still on my mind
like a veil, in everything I do, see, and think.
You're gone now,
but theres still a whisper of you on my lips.
Will you come back?
Come and renew yourself to me.
Are you worth my tears?
All we had was onw night.
But it was so much more that that.
Because I fell in love that night.
So you need to decide,
make up your mind,
Is this for real?


-dedicated to Dusty

Jenn

[This message has been edited by BrokenDreams (02-16-2003 09:27 PM).]

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majnu
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since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088
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1 posted 2003-02-16 08:15 PM


Welcome to Passions!

I found your poem quite interesting and though provoking while being romantic at the same time.

I look forward to reading more of your poetry and your responses to our wonderful family of poets! (Please check your e-mail for a special greeting.)

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
2 posted 2003-02-20 08:13 PM



Jennifer~
This is a nicely written piece and a great
choice for a first post.
Welcome to Passions.  I hope to see lots more from you.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Jenn Cirrincione
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Fl
3 posted 2003-02-21 09:11 AM


Hey Jenn, Love the name!
Welcome to passions, this poem was a really great start into our world, very emotional. You can only improve with practice, so don't stop writing!!

Jenn

"Now I'm convinced that he's heaven sent, and must be out of his mind- mama he's crazy, crazy over me."

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