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wvplayernotreally
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since 2002-11-06
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yakima wa

0 posted 2003-02-12 08:42 PM



I hold the paper in my hand
bite at the tip of the pen
What can I say to him that he doesn't know?
I could tell him hes everything to me
my mind and heart and soul are his
he can take them whenever he wants.
Thats corny, I can't say that.
I could tell him from the first smile I loved him
The first time our hands carressed eachother
my heart beat faster then it ever has
the moment you were in my driveway
i was sweating in fear for you leaving.
all of these things i want to tell you
but, I can't. I am so in love with you
I can't let you leave her.
Shes you heart, your soul and mind.
I wish I could just hold your hand once
have your arms wrapped around me
and have a gentle soft kiss.
My heart says we should be together
like a scene from Romeo and Juliet
two different lives, one love
I love just looking at you
Smiling at you, then you returning the smiles
All i want is to hold on to you and the memories
tell you how I feel on this day, and everyday.
But, I fear for only in my dreams i will tell you.

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

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NSnaomian
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since 2002-07-22
Posts 232
In my troll closet I be
1 posted 2003-02-13 09:45 PM


That is kind of sad and I am sorry you are in a situation like that...for your write I have one thing, You go from speaking of him, to speaking to him (using him, then using you)
and that may throw off the reader off some.
Very good though.
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

BrokenDreams
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since 2003-02-09
Posts 425
In The Clouds
2 posted 2003-02-13 10:37 PM


I was recently in the same situation. hope things work out for you.

jenn

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
3 posted 2003-02-14 12:04 PM


Heartfelt poem, I can relate to it too well.
I especially loved the lines, "I am so in love with you, I can't let you leave her."
When the guy I liked started dating another girl, I was really sad at first, but then I was just happy for him, and THAT is real love.
Hope everything gets better for you!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

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