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0 posted 2003-02-12 01:52 AM



Falling fast I've got you charmed.
You've lost the stress, soft kiss.
No longer alarmed, you rest,
here now comfortable, in my arms.

It's you and me, in this cleft.
Shed our tears and seek a peace.
Let extasy be deft our guide,
fall further from our minds.

This love is passion bent,
our self-made charity, this new reality.

© Copyright 2003 Daniel Redding - All Rights Reserved
molly_the_dolly
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1 posted 2003-02-12 11:55 PM


great poem, very deep
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2 posted 2003-02-13 10:05 PM


Absolutely loved it!
Yes, very deep indeed and cute too.
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

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3 posted 2003-02-15 05:02 PM


Well, thank you, you two.

~Titus

Es ist gut, daß das Leben die Toten studieren sollte.

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4 posted 2003-02-15 06:19 PM


A different take on love; well done, PoetryIsLife. Good length, good flow.

Actually... perhaps a bit too short?

Glad I read it, sir.

E


[This message has been edited by Ephraim (02-15-2003 06:20 PM).]

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5 posted 2003-02-16 12:31 PM


great poem!

~You can make more friends in two months by becoming interested in people, than you can in two years by trying to get people interested in you.~


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6 posted 2003-02-17 08:10 PM




Titus

"On the plains of Hesitation lie the blackend bones of countless millions, who, at the verge of victory, sat down to wait, and waiting - died."

  

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