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Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California

0 posted 2003-02-08 04:29 PM


I don't want to give you
the satisfaction of my tears,
I don't want to give you anything.
I owe you nothing.
I lie on these cold title floors,
day after day.
I trace the wholes in the walls,
the cracks along the window pane.
Lines that lead everywhere but out.
I don't want to cry..
but the agony of you,
is penitrating my sheild of strength.
My armor is dented and mangled,
from your many blows.
My insides are finally justly protrayed.
I'd like to think I did this to myself..
that my own fists inflicted these wounds.
Rather than think your beautiful hands caused my fragile skin to bruise.
Maybe I'm too weak.
I don't want to cry,
I lie on these cold title floors,
I cringe at your cold finger tips,
sharp as knives,
shattering the surface of my skin, of my heart.
I don't want to you anything,
but I can't tell you, how bad it hurts.

[This message has been edited by Lexy (02-08-2003 06:44 PM).]

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NSnaomian
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since 2002-07-22
Posts 232
In my troll closet I be
1 posted 2003-02-08 04:32 PM


Hmm I got the majority of this but the last two lines threw me off..is there a missing word or am I reading it wrong?
Good though and very emotional.
I'm not sure what to say in this one based on what to fix, but I'[m sure others could help you there.
Laura

"All that I desire to point out is the general principle that Life imitates Art far more than Art imitates Life."
-Oscar Wilde

Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
2 posted 2003-02-08 04:37 PM


Yeah I kinda screwed up on the lasttwo lines, its thee way you can go back and edit your posts? I meant to say: I don't want to give you anything, but I can't tell you how bad it hurts.
Thanks for reading, and sorry 'bout that.

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
3 posted 2003-02-08 05:09 PM


Wow! Great work! And welcome to passions! Since I didn't get to read your first post I have to tell you now.
I really loved this poem! I'll be reading more of yours.
And yes you can edit your poem, on the left top part of the page where it says your name there's some icons across from it, one of them looks like a piece of paper with a pencil over it, click that one.

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

Victoria7
Junior Member
since 2003-01-28
Posts 21

4 posted 2003-02-08 06:47 PM


i really liked your poem, i can really realte to it! thnax for sharing it w/ me!
barbaraj
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since 2003-01-24
Posts 139
Nova Scotia, Canada
5 posted 2003-02-08 08:49 PM


this was a great poem. now that i know the way the last two lines should go, it makes more sense.

~You can make more friends in two months by becoming interested in people, than you can in two years by trying to get people interested in you.~


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