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The Frantic |
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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
This is kinda long I know, but the lines are short. It is describing how frantic bad dreams can be. Hope you enjoy and don't get too confused. Not all of it makes sense however, most bad dreams don't either. ~The Frantic~ Heart pulse Rapid Breath, stuck in my lungs Losing my balance Regaining it… Losing it again… Permanently this time Now falling Why can’t I remember? What do I do? In case of Emergency? Spiraling down Out of control GET AWAY! COME BACK! PLEASE DON’T GO! I need to be alone right now I’m afraid of the dark No mom I don’t need that nightlight Anymore I’m a big boy now What was that? Who are you? What are you…? Where are you taking me? Dreaming I got to wake up! I’m tired I’m going to hit the hay See you in the morning… Maybe. Unless the… Squirrels get me! They want their nuts back! And they’re looking at me! I don’t have them But they… They don’t know that They want to kill Me Just like You. It’s your fault You did this to me While it did it to Myself. Breathe… Please don’t die on me! 5 words 7 syllables “I don’t love you anymore.” Really?! FINE THEN, GO! I DON’T NEED YOU ANYWAY! Oh God I miss you Already. What heartbreak Fairytales Can’t we love? Why not?! O.k.… I know my own Way out. Thanks for your time And sorry for bothering You. These dreams relieve Me from the black Comfort of Sleep. Tumbling down The stairs of the Bottomless Pit. It hurts so… Good? Beautiful pain stings My pockets. OW! OW! FUNNYBONE! That wasn’t beautiful But I’m laughing Just the same. OH! NO! CAN’T! STOP! LAUGHING! Can’t breath Can’t see I’M BLIND! Falling behind The Powder Blue Wall. Growing pains Shudder my side with agony When I hit The Powder Blue Floor. This has been a public service Announcement From… OH MY GOD I BROKE MY ARM! Wrong… Wrong! This is all wrong! This can’t be happening to Me. Because I’m DREAMING! WAKE UP! WAKE UP! IT’S NOT WORKING! I’m to tired to wake up It echoes again… “I” Can’t believe its back “Don’t” STOP! PLEASE! “Lu… Lu…” NO! NO! “LOVE YOU ANYMORE!” No other choice but This! I’m falling again? Wake Up! NOW! Where am I? Mom!? Dad!? “Come downstairs, breakfast is almost ready!” What? It was all a dream? “Orange juice Honey?” No thanks Mom. “You know your Father and I have decided that…” No please don’t say it! “We don’t love you…” “Wake up son it’s time for school.” No get away from me! I hate you! Get me out of here! No Escape This is only a test. If it was a real emergency You would die Because we won’t Direct you to Safety. There really is no chance For me Inside The Frantic |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Omg wow...this was just awesome in so many ways. Amazing job! Standing on the edge of the world |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Wow. My heart was pounding while I read this all the way to the end. O.O Crazy what words can do to you. x_X You had some great lines in this one, like the one about squirrels wanting their nuts back...^^ I enjoyed that one. It was amusing. But there were some really artistic moments in here that brought the depth, that it wasn't all just constant screaming and continuity. That's another thing: I really liked how this flowed. Everything was well placed and thought out. Wonderful work! Can't wait to read more! ^_^ Leah ps- Adding to library. ^_^ (The squirrels did it...  ) |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Wow... this indeed is The Frantic. Im very impressed  Monkey!! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Darkness~ At the risk of repeating the others, "WOW"! You did a GREAT job on this. It was like a roller coaster ride that I couldn't get off of until the end...very intense. Excellent job on this one. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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*Belabebeautiful*
since 2003-01-03
Posts 696washington, USA |
I'm sure this is starting to sound redundant but wow! My pulse was racing when I read this it is indeed just as you say, frantic! Very well written good emotions, you sound chaotic and still there is conformity very enjoyable read! People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today. |
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Ephraim Junior Member
since 2002-12-07
Posts 24 |
Damn. E |
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