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Deep_Inside
Member

since 2002-02-14

Posts 377
i can't stop hiding

0 posted 2003-07-07 03:44 AM

hell has
found it’s way
into my
every day

destroying
invading
my vision
is fading

dwindling
into nothing
a dot of light
my something

I hold on
what for
I soon will be
no more

Crystal Rohlandt
New Member

since 2003-07-07

Posts 6
Cape Town, South Africa

1 posted 2003-07-07 08:44 AM

We all feel like this at one time or another.It hurts more to know that others suffer as I do. Wish I could help ease some of your pain.

dertah
Senior Member

since 2003-06-18

Posts 584

2 posted 2003-07-08 01:24 AM

spiraling down into the depths of destruction, because we play a game called love and the referee hence its name is blind. good luck my friend. nice work.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-07-09 07:07 PM

I know the feeling.
I live hell everyday too and I've gotten to the point where I've stopped wating for things to get better.
Excellent poem, your emotions were expressed perfectly.
Im sure alot of other people can relate too.
Once again, well done. And going in my library.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

4 posted 2003-07-26 11:15 PM

all too true. the third stanza was my favorite. I really felt this.
~Lex

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

5 posted 2003-07-26 11:36 PM

i really liked the last stanza...but the whole thing was really good. the shortness of the lines, to me, took a bit away from the poem, but the context made up for it....

good job

riley

*the bloody tide comes in on the shore, time after time*

Rise of Truth
Member

since 2003-07-12

Posts 59
Beneath the Fury Sun

6 posted 2003-07-27 12:42 PM

I...always liked destruction. There's an artistic contrast between it and creation that can be breath-taking.

Your poem was snappy. It worked well with the theme.

Star T
Member

since 2002-07-12

Posts 182
Philadelphia, US

7 posted 2003-07-27 05:03 PM

okay now that was some write-up!it was deep and full of emotions ... depression, sadness.please never give up on life..no matter what,JESUS will hold ur hands and take u thru the hard times!

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