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Teen Poetry #6

Frozen Fingertips

Allysa

Senior Member

since 1999-11-09

Posts 1952
In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2003-01-29 09:36 PM

She breaks the crackers in
her tomato soups
washes her pain away in
that familiar bowl of food
she calls his house
every day just to listen
to that hollow voice
on the answering machine
that promises to call back
but never does.

She blinks her eyes, her
eyelashes fall into her soup,
making ripples in her everpresent
lonesome bowl of comfort.
She longs for red, for anything
but this stupid bluish color
that rules her life and suffocates
her soul while she attempts to dream
of better days when things went her way.

She cracks her knuckles, her
skin peels off, chunks dripping
into her tomato soup as she
paves the way from the tips of
her frozen fingers and into the
center of her heart.

"Wie ein Quadrat in einem Kreis, eck' ich immer wieder an obwohl ich doch schon lange weiß, daß ich niemals ändern kann." ~Wizo

Acies

Moderator

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

1 posted 2003-01-31 03:45 PM

Your poetry has just grown thru time
Keep it up, and I'll definitely keep reading
thanks for sharing

là où est mon amour?
donde está mi amour?
wo ist meine Liebe?
Nelly Furtado é a menina a mais bonita no mundo largo do todo.

Lexy
Senior Member

since 2003-01-28

Posts 1038
California

2 posted 2003-01-31 09:45 PM

This was very well written on a deep and interestingly protrayed subject. Very sad. It seemed to flow better in the begginging then it did toward the end. I enjoyed it very much...thanks for sharing.
~Lexy

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