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Song_for_Serenity
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since 2003-05-28
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0 posted 2003-07-06 10:30 PM


Yeah, I know I've written a poem like this before, but what can I say? My A.C.'s always on my mind. I sent this to him a few weeks ago and thought about posting it, but I hadn't gotten around to it until now. Hope you people enjoy!

People ask me what I love about you
And so many things come to mind
There’s so much that I can tell them
So many things to find

First of all your beautiful smile,
And those gorgeous eyes so green
And the way you can quote a line
From every movie that you’ve seen.
The way that your scent surrounds me
When I put your sweater on
How very much I miss you
Whenever you are gone
And there’s the way you make me feel
When you tell me I’m all yours
The happiness you bring to me,
The way that my heart soars.
And of course those tender kisses,
That send shivers down my spine
The way you say, “I love you”
And tell me you’re all mine.
The way you whisper in my ear
And hug me close to you,
The way you put precision
Into everything that you do
There’s the way you give me flowers
And how romantic you can be
Every moment that we share
I record to memory
Then there’s the way you made me vulnerable
When you taught me to open my heart
And then you made me realize
That it was worth it from the start

And as more ideas came to mind,
I couldn’t pick which one to say
So I just told them that you’re perfect for me
In every single way.


_______
Have a spiffy day!


~Angela
"Anything less than mad, passionate love is wasting your time...Life has too many mediocre things in it, love shouldn't be one of them..."

[This message has been edited by Song_for_Serenity (07-06-2003 10:31 PM).]

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Spine Grinder
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Standing In Silence...
1 posted 2003-07-07 12:26 PM


WOAH!!!! Holy Cow! I really liked this! ALOT. This is so going in my library lol. Grrrrreeattt job.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

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2 posted 2003-07-07 12:39 PM


hmmm...touched some heart strings there..I feel kinda akward saying that I know where your coming from but I guess I do..he can be such a teddy bear huh? Anyways wonderful write your love for him flows through the whole thing loud and beautifully clear. Hold that close don't lose the magic that you two have for it is a very specail thing
~Live and Laugh~

The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

Kandi
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since 2000-06-14
Posts 354
North of Hell
3 posted 2003-07-07 01:47 AM


Ya know, in all honesty I usually don't like these kinds of love poems, but this in an exception. I really loved this one. I think it's because it was so detailed and honest and almost innocent. I'm sure ur boyfriend loved it!
Good work
~Kay

Just wanna be funny,looks like the joke's on me.
So call me Captain Backfire.

Song_for_Serenity
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since 2003-05-28
Posts 97
USA
4 posted 2003-07-07 10:27 AM


Hey guys! Thanks for your kind replies. I'm glad that you people liked it. Have a spiffy day!

~Angela
"Anything less than mad, passionate love is wasting your time...Life has too many mediocre things in it, love shouldn't be one of them..."

dertah
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since 2003-06-18
Posts 584

5 posted 2003-07-07 01:19 PM


ah yes, love in all its sickening glory that binds us to another.  i really loved this one, brings back some not yet buried memories.  i commend you on the excellent poem.

[This message has been edited by dertah (07-07-2003 01:20 PM).]

Savage Quiescence
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since 2002-07-29
Posts 326
Wandering
6 posted 2003-07-07 09:14 PM


*Passes out tissues* "All together now!"

Aaawwwwwww!

This is not only beautiful. The flow is excellent. You organized your thoughts very well. Thanks a lot for sharing.
~Sky

"Whatever life brings, I've been through everything, but now I'm on my knees again" -Creed

Alnilam
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since 2003-07-04
Posts 75

7 posted 2003-07-07 10:26 PM


Ok so as i was finishing reading this i thought of how perfect it is for my ex, and how miserable i am to have let something go so easily. loved it a thousand times over! great read thank u!

~*Alnilam*~
"The worst tragedy for a poet is to be admired through being misunderstood."

Toasty
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since 2003-06-09
Posts 74
my little hole in wisconsin
8 posted 2003-07-07 11:40 PM


Wow...excellent!Normally I don't get into love poems that much, but this just got to me. It was grrrrrrrreat! Keep up the good work.


~toasty

"Nothing is so strong as gentleness; Nothing so gentle as real strength."  -Francis de Sales.

chicken
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since 2003-07-27
Posts 44

9 posted 2003-07-27 06:39 PM


great poem really sweet im sure your boyfriend loved it as much as i did! x x x


Lexy
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since 2003-01-28
Posts 1038
California
10 posted 2003-07-27 08:15 PM


BLEH! j/k...I just really don't like love poems. And this to me was no different. You got get creative when it comes to love..its supposed to inspire..so they say.
~Lex..

Mick Hawkes
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since 2000-10-26
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Tees-side , England
11 posted 2003-07-27 10:18 PM


Loved it

Never take life too seriously - None of us gets out alive!

SilentTears
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since 2003-02-15
Posts 371
Lost and Broken
12 posted 2003-07-27 10:54 PM


Woah...I can't describe how much I liked this. It's definitely going into my library. It's one of those poems that just makes your heart cry...whether it be joy, or sorrow. Either way...beautiful poem. It flowed PERFECTLY. Wonderful poem.

As I smile at everyone else, I'm dying inside... ~Me

peachesNcream
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since 2001-08-21
Posts 513
Ocean Of Tears
13 posted 2003-07-27 10:54 PM


Awww! This was REALLY sweet! ~Jess

"At the touch of love, everything becomes a poem." -Plato

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
...Coming to
14 posted 2003-07-28 12:55 PM


Thanks for the tissue Sky, *dabs at eyes*
Beautiful poem!!!! Im completely blown away,
this touched me so much.
You have a wonderful thing. Never let it go.
And right now you're probably thinking, "Duh!"
Once again, beautiful!!

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

Song_for_Serenity
Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 97
USA
15 posted 2003-07-28 12:23 PM


Heh.. I didn't realize that this was still getting replies. Thank you very much everyone!

~Angela
"Anything less than mad, passionate love is wasting your time...Life has too many mediocre things in it, love shouldn't be one of them..."

~*Tantalize*~
Junior Member
since 2003-07-29
Posts 26
Sunny California (San Francisco Bay Area)
16 posted 2003-07-29 11:08 PM


Hey, I'm Jen, I'm new here as of today, this is the first poem I have replied to, I haven't even posted yet! This is a really beautiful poem, I know how you feel! You're a great writer!
~Jen

tapper798
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since 2003-07-20
Posts 353
My own world
17 posted 2003-07-30 05:26 PM


That was so awsome! I really liked how if was so perfect for a relationship! Keep up the work! It was awsome.

To the world, you're one person;
to one person, you're the world.
   *~Erin~*

chicken
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since 2003-07-27
Posts 44

18 posted 2003-07-30 07:23 PM


i know lexy posted ages ago but if u]he§s readng this i want him to know if he  doesnt  like love poems why bother comment! if song_for_serenity didnt like what u wrote how would u feel if she dissed your poetry! sorry for writin this but it gets my back up, great write btw i really enjoyed reading it!
-Emma

Song_for_Serenity
Member
since 2003-05-28
Posts 97
USA
19 posted 2003-07-30 10:35 PM


Hey everyone. Once again, thank you for your replies. I still can't believe this is getting 'em. And thank you for sticking up for me, Chicken. Although, I don't really mind the comments. I enjoy truthfulness, it'll help me improve my writing. Anyhoo, you people have spiffy day!
Sealed with a

~Angela
"Anything less than mad, passionate love is wasting your time...Life has too many mediocre things in it, love shouldn't be one of them..."

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