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IndigoEve
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0 posted 2003-01-27 03:45 PM


This started as a little four-liner poem....but I couldn't help but add more!! Enjoy!
Beyond the end of reality
Dreams are born from tears
My cries of despair may still be heard
But will diminish throughout the years


Eluded by simple recognition
The world does not yet know
This place, my saving grace, I've found
That sustained me through my throes


I could steal away to paradise
But that would not cease the pain
To numb the ache is not enough
Respite is what I need to attain


Maybe I should vacation a while
And let my mind at ease
Only that rest I can't seem to find
Is as fugitive as the breeze


Take me away to Shangri-La
Where dreams are born from tears
My happy place is where I'll be
Oblivious to all my former fears



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1 posted 2003-01-27 10:43 PM


Beautiful! Absolutly wonderful. I loved the emotions that were woven throughout the poem the rhyming scheme was excellent it wasn't forced but flowed very naturally it went from one thought to another with ease and it was a good meaning to sit and brood over, I've felt that feeling many times. Well written!

People always ask me why I don't look toward my future I tell them to many interesting things are happening today.
~Bella~

barbaraj
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2 posted 2003-01-28 01:28 PM


wonderful poem simply wondeful!! i'm glad you din't leave it as a four liner!

Dean
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3 posted 2003-01-28 01:34 PM


Awesome Poem! Keep up the good work!
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4 posted 2003-01-28 02:29 PM


Awww. Very pretty, I found it to be quite soothing. Nice.

Jenn

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5 posted 2003-01-29 10:05 AM


*gets Idler's Dream in her head...* mmmm..

This was alright. Keep writing! You're on the way to somewhere.

  ~Carly

"Gather ye rosebuds while ye may,
   Old Time is still a-flying,
And this same flower that smiles to-day
   To-morrow will be dying."
          

IndigoEve
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6 posted 2003-01-30 11:50 AM


hmmm...just stopping by to say "THANKS!"

I am sick today... the flu is so evil....

I am ever so grateful for all the replies...


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