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snoduck
Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 99
Selah, WA

0 posted 2003-01-26 11:39 PM


I've heard people say
That everyone deserves
A second chance
That it's always good
To forgive and forget
But I never make it
That far past the
Break up
I tried to be thoughtful
And show you
How much I care
I never meant to
Be as selfish
As in the past
I took into consideration
Your feelings,
As well as mine
You broke my heart
I bruised your soul
We're even
That's what I
Wanted to believe
Then I thought
About it a while
And this is my conclusion
You lied, and
You cheated, not me
I begged you
To forgive the things
I didn't mean to say
To forgive me
For handing you
My fragile heart
Taking my feelings
Taking your feelings
All too seriously
I cried alone
Because of you
If it's not one thing
It's definitly the next
But dam*it
I have feelings too
I'm tired of hurting
And feeling so dirty
You won't open up
And tell me how
You feel inside
How you feel
About me
About us
So how should I know
that you really cared?
How should I know
You didn't just use me
Like everyone else?
You said a lot of things
That you swore
You really did mean
But how am i
Supposed to know
It wasn't all a
Basket of lies?
Everywhere you touched
I'm afraid to go
Afraid I might catch
A whiff of your cologne
Or that I might remember
Your blue eyes
Looking over at me
But I'm deathly afraid
Of seeing your face
Your body
Laying on my bed
I'm scared that
When I call you
You'll be home, and
I'll hear your voice
You are my weakness
My worst fear, and
The one thing
I miss having around
There is nothing
To stop my tears
To stop my bleeding
Yet I was willing
To catch you if
You happened to slip
I'm not going to say
How dark and scared
I feel on the inside
Because I don't
Want your pity
Or your sympathy
I'm sorry about
All the things gone wrong
So I've stopped
Fighting this battle
and I've surrendered
To this war
No use in fighting
For you anymore
You've obviously moved on
Seeing as how
You avoid my phone calls
Then don't ever
Return them
Because in all reality
I don't know anything
About you, or myself
But I believe in you
I care about you
I miss you, and
I'll always be here
Waiting for you.

-Erica-

© Copyright 2003 Erica Reeves - All Rights Reserved
Kielo
Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109

1 posted 2003-01-26 11:48 PM


Wow... That was long, and at the beginning, I thought it was going to be just another poem. However, you proved me very wrong. This poem speaks to me, on a very personal level. I liked it very much.

Kielo

I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing.

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member
since 2001-04-14
Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA
2 posted 2003-01-27 06:00 PM


Hey Erica!  I already told ya I like this one, but I'll tell you again.  I like it.  It was definitely felt from the heart.  Anyway, glad you were finally able to post this.     

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?  

devinechild22
Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571

3 posted 2003-01-28 08:28 AM


This was an excellent write. I loved the emotions and everything about it. I have a suggestion/question. Were the short lines for a purpose or is it a song and that`s why? If not it just made it kinda harder to read but it did keep me in suspense to see the next line when I was scrolling down   Good write and keep it up!
           *Allison*

"O My love
Please don`t cry
I`ll wash my bloody hands
And well start a new life"
-Good Charlotte

[This message has been edited by devinechild22 (01-28-2003 08:29 AM).]

foreverwithyou
Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204
Wonderland
4 posted 2003-01-28 08:26 PM


i liked this poem alot even tho it was long and i dont usually get thru long poems but i read this one and i really liked ur name too!!!


         CATHY

"I am who I am who I am who am I?"

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