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*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

0 posted 2003-01-26 01:36 AM

There is something different about this one..I'm not sure what it is I can't quite put my finger on it but something...

I thought at last the pain had passed
And my feelings for you were through,
But my thoughts lied... for again I cried
When I slept and my dreams were of you.

So vivid a picture- I felt it was real
As we sat holding hands by the sea
I stared in your eyes, looked deep in your soul
And I knew by your side would I be.

As the dream carried on the sea sang it's song
So we danced to the tune that it played
But the song wouldn't stay for the dream wore away
And I cried for the fool I portrayed.

I awoke filled with fear, surrounded in tears
Still hurt from the pains of the past
A mistake I had made, each night I have paid
Now I wonder how long it will last…

Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love)
~Bella~

the_jazzician
Junior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 30

1 posted 2003-01-26 01:43 PM

Wow !! this is such a beautiful poem , its sad though but very very good. Try not to get down by any decisions you've made in the past , we all learn from our mistakes and one day we all see that those things which we considered mistakes at the time have in fact shaped our lives for the best

"First remove the plank from your own eye so you can see better to remove the splinter from your brother's eye" - Jesus

smurf_gurl
Junior Member

since 2003-01-20

Posts 19
US of A

2 posted 2003-01-26 01:50 PM

I loved your rhyme scheme. and the poem itself is darling. I can connect with it though because I'vebeen down that road...it was long and winding, full of ups and downs. but you'll get through it, especially if you write

~Stace

Boredom is killing me...
Boredom is killing...
Boredom is...
Boredom...
.....

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2003-01-26 02:35 PM

Woah, That one is so awesome!
You can't possibly imagine how much I love this poem!! It's definitly a keeper for my library.
GREAT job!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

4 posted 2003-01-26 03:51 PM

WOW thats really really really good. Literally breathtaking.

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

5 posted 2003-01-26 08:05 PM

Thank you for your comments guys! They mean a lot to me. I'm glad you like the poem.

Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love)
~Bella~

Kielo
Senior Member

since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

6 posted 2003-01-27 10:58 PM

I loved this... dreams are fickle. It actually reminded me of the verse to "You are my sunshine." You know? The song?

I love that song...

A very well done poem.

Kielo

I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing.

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