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Jenn Cirrincione

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since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

0 posted 2003-01-23 12:41 PM

Shhhh...I'm just peeking in

Anyone miss me?

Not really here-
and never really there.
An icy wind
blows
me over,
and I try
to catch my footing.
Memories wash over me,
and I try to figure out-
was I ever happy?
As you lie
next
to
me
I feel
the deepest connection.
And I wonder why
even within
your arms-
smothered by a goofy grin,
even after your
generously
warm
heart
touches mine...
I still, sometimes,
feel cold.

"I keep looking, looking for something more." Sara Evans

Marshalzu

Member Elite

since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
Lurking

1 posted 2003-01-23 12:51 PM

This really is icy, very well written and I was compelled to read on. Great work. It's nice to see you posting again and I know that I at least have missed you, maybe you could peek in more often

Andrew

My Violent Bedtime Stories

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

2 posted 2003-01-24 06:46 AM

Jenn!! *bounces*

Hell yes I missed you. We should really catch up soon.
I do like this. It's poetry in one of it's most ferocious and raw ways. It's nice to see you left the question lingering at the end as it leaves something for the reader to get more out of. You know - a bit of reflection. It's well written and constructed. Loving it.

Talk to you soon, ok?

~AF~

"Write something, even if it's just a suicide note." -- Gore Vidal

barbaraj
Member

since 2003-01-24

Posts 139
Nova Scotia, Canada

3 posted 2003-01-24 09:36 PM

this poem was great. i started reading and could not stop.

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

4 posted 2003-01-24 09:40 PM

Very nice.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

5 posted 2003-01-25 10:53 PM

I liked that... especially the ending. I'm not sure that I like the formatting, but I can read it however I want to so that's not a big deal because the wording is so very good. Nice write... ice...

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

6 posted 2003-01-25 11:25 PM

This was a really good poem!
I liked it alot, especially the end,
well and the beginning too, and of course there was nothing wrong with the middle lol!
Well done!

WinterWren
"Even a fool knows that we cannot touch the stars, but that doesn't keep the wise from trying."

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