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benjiz_babe
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since 2003-01-23

Posts 1

0 posted 2003-01-23 03:41 AM

Hey! this is a poem I write after my ex broke up with me and I was still in love with him and felt so helpless without him.. I'd appreciate sum replies.
Thanks

The pure essence of her existence
He drips life from her lips
holds her together like glueis ignorant to the power he holds over her.
She finds comfort absorbing his words
Hanging on his every move and breath
Her heart fills with fear at the thought of his absence
Just a day apart and her life breaks a little
She would throw her life away
If only he would ask her to
She craves for his touch
can almost feel it on her skin
Loneliness usually consumes her
and she knows she's naive
but she cries and the pain washes out with the tears.
she bleeds and the fear seeps out with the blood
she lets herself drown in his life
consumed by his heart and mind
imagining him as the love of her life
coating him with a veil of perfection
it's getting so thick even she can't strip away the layers
She grows blind cause she doesn't want to see
In her mind only he stands clear
and in her mind he's all she'll ever need.

leo_babe
Junior Member

since 2003-01-22

Posts 13

1 posted 2003-01-23 03:44 AM

OMG!!! B!!! It's fab!! It's so true...it's how I'm feeling at the moment...but just remember...all girls out there...we don't need guys to be happy!

Jaime

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Posts 250

2 posted 2003-01-23 10:52 PM

I thought this was great.. really, just rich with emotional and mental honesty. Good job.

- Jaime

Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe.

CwboyAtHeart
Senior Member

since 2001-04-14

Posts 541
Selah, WA, USA

3 posted 2003-01-24 08:46 PM

You don't need the wrong guys to try to be happy, anyway...

Anyway, I liked this. Guys can be total jerks, but oh well. Not all guys are... Well, thanks for sharing this, I enjoyed the read.

      - Cody -

Note To Self:  If Pigs Can Fly, So Can I!!!

If someboy laughs at me, does that make me funny or just plain stupid?

barbaraj
Member

since 2003-01-24

Posts 139
Nova Scotia, Canada

4 posted 2003-01-24 08:59 PM

great poem. honest, emotional. it hit close to home when i read it.

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

5 posted 2003-01-24 09:12 PM

That's really good. Not the typical angsty whining. It actually says something.

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

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