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Ree Ree
Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 56
providence, RI

0 posted 2003-01-22 07:29 PM

******hey guys... looks long, but it's all indented so it isn't as long as it seems... thanks for reading******

MY ERICA

we dance
in the hallway to no music
with no light
you can't see the tears
and you know
without seeing.
That's what i love about you,
the knowing.
But you never seem to see
to understand
what i'm singing
here
in my mind
or even outload.
mostly because you're never looking
not there, here
who would?
No ONe.
you never see
when i try so hard
to show you
to tell you
without truth
without words
without telling
tell you everything
implying
suggesting
and failing miserably

we kiss
and i am complete
for the smallest moment
complete
but you can't hear what it says
what it means
you don't hear me
that way
implying
and getting no where
quickly
assuredly
normally
getting nowhere

we gaze
myself at you
i wish some how
you could know
what runs through me now
you aren't here
you don't connect
gazing back
you don't gaze back
like lovers do
i thought
maybe that's a tale
people tell their children
to assure them
that when they gaze
longingly,
hoping only for
that connection
there will always be
someone
there
who will gaze back
longing for them too.

We sit
i sing
the words for you
the tune...
for my mind
to steady
to assure
to make comfortable.
I sing to make you see
but you can't hear
you turn away
disacknowledging
forgetting
or
perhaps never knowing
never caring at all.
It's better
with out knowing
misinterpretting
my unspoken words
this way
i can pretend that i never said
and
you can pretend that you never heard
no one uncomfortable
no one pressured
however
leaving no one assured.

**** this is kind of a draft, but i liked how it sounded, what do you think i could do to improve or should i leave it? i don't know. I kind of finished my thought so i'm not sure if i cshould keep going or leave it. Does anyone even understand the thought? i'm not sure if it's vague or not. Anyways... any input would be kewl thanks... : )***

leo_babe
Junior Member

since 2003-01-22

Posts 13

1 posted 2003-01-23 03:35 AM

Hey I really like your poem...I don't think you should change it...sometimes it's just best to trust the first thing that comes out of your mind you know?

Ree Ree
Member

since 2001-06-28

Posts 56
providence, RI

2 posted 2003-01-23 05:05 PM

yeah... i wasn't sure... thanks.. i guess i'll leave it ...

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