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Hallucination
Member

since 2001-03-18

Posts 419

0 posted 2003-01-20 09:43 AM

"Unbelievable"
(20/01/03)
© 2003 Brian Eggertsen, All Rights Reserved

Verse 1
It's unbelievable,
The romance in your eyes.
It's unbelievable,
One look and I was caught in your light,
Now your the love of my life.
It's unbelievable,
You're the heart of my heart.
It's unbelievable,
The times you can wish upon a star,
Now we are just as one part.
It's unbelievable.

Chorus
Unbelievable,
Completely beautiful, you are
The only one for me.
Unbelievable,
Endlessly desireble, you are
The only one I see.
It's unbelievable.
You're unbelievable.

Verse 2
It's undenyable,
I love you like I do.
It's undenyable,
That you are more than a dream come true,
Well thank you for being you.
It's undenyable,
You're the soul of my soul,
It's undenyable.
That you always make me lose control,
Well you really fit your role.
It's undenyable.

Chorus

Bridge
Can't put into words how I feel.
Never felt anything so real,
But it's plain to see you're the one.
My emotions can touch the sky,
I want to spread my wings and fly,
Seems like my life has just begun.

Chorus

Spine Grinder
Senior Member

since 2000-10-28

Posts 1127
Standing In Silence...

1 posted 2003-01-20 10:25 AM

awww this was sweet! i liked this alot! great write.

If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain.

smurf_gurl
Junior Member

since 2003-01-20

Posts 19
US of A

2 posted 2003-01-20 07:52 PM

hmm...very nice indeed. Though for some reason the tune to "Back at One" kept popping into my head while reading it, making it very difficult to follow along, lol. A few words reminding me of the song, obviously. Ah well, still a good write, and would enjoy listening to that on the radio some day

~Stace

BabieDoll
Member

since 2003-02-13

Posts 268
BFE

3 posted 2003-02-15 06:38 PM

I absolutely LOVE this piece!

The way you wrote it ( like a song ) was a really good idea and I could actually put a nice rhythm to it. One of your best poems!

~J.Lynn

"In life you must dance like no one is watching, sing like no one is listening and love like it's never going to hurt..."

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