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Teen Poetry #6

out the window

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

0 posted 2003-01-18 09:27 PM

Out the window the sun shines
Now matter how bad it is I look outside
With the trees and grass growing
they sway with the wind

Birds fly, dogs bark
Its so much better outside
everyone is so happy
laughing loving hope joy all seem to flow

Inside it hurts
My window is shut, everything out nothing in
only longing to open it
have life course through my veins

Its stuck, why does it happen to me
Frozen in time past and present
The window my only way to the future happiness
closed off

I close my curtains, no one can see me
They don't know what its like
to long for a life to begin
while theirs run short, out my window

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

Missthang
Member

since 2001-07-03

Posts 103

1 posted 2003-01-19 12:08 PM

Such a sad poem...
I like what it was showing. The window immage and the outside and inside was a great way to show the "shelterdness" that people posess. The part about the struggle of trying to open that window was really good. Is this a poem directly related to you? And if so, what casued you to feel as if happiness was off limits to you? Nice post.
-AB

"Whatever you are doing, love yourslef for doing it.
Whatever you are feeling, love yourself for feeling it."
-Thaddeus Golas

wvplayernotreally
Member

since 2002-11-06

Posts 215
yakima wa

2 posted 2003-01-19 12:59 PM

Ya this poem totally falls into play with me. For me its more to the point where the happiness is...I kinda like to think i have split personalities...not like the crazy type but when i am at home and school are different. So its showing how unhappy i am compared to when the window is open at school..if that makes sense

" I think I got a tan from the light in which i was basking."

topsyturveychick
Member

since 2003-01-19

Posts 57
Bris,QLD,Aus

3 posted 2003-01-19 03:56 AM

I found it a bit abstract to read. However after reading it over a couple of times I can get where ur coming from. So I'd give it two thumbs up!!!!!

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