[This message has been edited by Trouble Breathing (01-17-2003 07:00 PM).]

"There are limitless possibilities,
But limited imaginations"

These are my favorite lines.   I love these two. That said, I might not use 'limetless' again down in the poem, here:

"Limitless seas of knowledge"

Vast seas of knowledge - perhaps? Something like that.  

I like the poem. I can take from it a lot of things.   I'm not sure if I get the last few lines, mainly, this one:

"I’ll continue to wish for all,"

The poem is great. I'm just not sure of the formatting... poems without line breaks, I've foudn, tend to bore the reader, and lose their interest fairly quickly, unless your an avid poetry reader, and maybe even then.  Its not that the content ain't great, but as humans, we can tend to be... limited, no?   You would know where you paused in writig when writing far better then I.

Maybe like this? Just a thought:

"Looking into the eyes of the innocent,
Looking into the uncertainty of my future.

As I look up into the sky,
A giant galaxy of the unknown,
A darkness, which cannot be explained
There are limitless possibilities,
But limited imaginations
Endless stars, farther than the eye can see.

Much beyond what we don’t know
Much beyond what we care to believe
Out there may be a bigger and better place,
Waiting to be discovered,
Waiting to be explored.*

There’s got to be more to this than I can see,
vast* seas of knowledge
Beautiful in their* own right
From the stars we can already see,
To the empty spaces,
Where I wish to be...

Someday we will know,
What is truly out there
What it all truly means
But until then Ill continue to dream
I’ll continue to wish for all,
That I’ll someday get to see."



~Titus

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (01-18-2003 02:48 PM).]