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Taurus42285
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since 2002-12-19

Posts 7

0 posted 2003-01-16 10:48 AM

Problems of our own

We all in other countries business we need to try to fix ours
The last time i checked we still had plenty of problems
Besides the towers poverty increase by the hour
The streets devour our bodies and keep blood bleaching our towels
They so worried about Saddam and Osama Bin
But i contend that first we need to fix our ecomony
Its hard 2 see the pain of our sisters and brothers
U got girls younger than me bout 2 b mothers
and Im 17 and like Martin i have a dream
But they seem ahead of me and receiving a head of steam
14 already lying bout things
Hit a growth spurt now they lying bout their age
Also days is hard people get laid off
Now a good paying job is playing war
Being moved like pawns trying 2 see in the dark
Some aint reaching a mark cause they speak from the heart
And it goes against what others stand for
So they re proclaimed as wrong, it seems like our leaders r gone
Replaced by a Bush from the forest
Call me crazy but we had only minor war problems when Clinton was in office
Now we worried bout nuclear weapons instead of hearing lessons
That are taught 2 us by teachers and parents
Speaking of teachers their unsung heroes of countries
Cause everybody gotta learn something
But yet one of the most important positions couldnt pay 4 a tutition
Or afford a business things should b diffrent
And we re still somewhat blind 2 what minorities face
We really need 2 get our priorities straight.

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

1 posted 2003-01-16 04:34 PM

William, this was right nice. It was cool as all get out when you read it in class today. That's all I can think of to write.

-Stinky Twinkie-

BrokenAngel
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since 2002-01-06

Posts 141
Puryear, TN, USA

2 posted 2003-01-16 06:12 PM

I'm going to be blunt on my reply to this work and if I offend you I'm sorry. But yes we have probelms of our own here but when they attacked us, they made there problems ours. The poem is nicely written, but the subject of it is what I don't like. Your entitled to your own views yes, but so am I so I decided to voice what I feel on the situation. I am a future United States Marine so I will end up over there fighting. But I see that our armed forces get very little respect for the things they do for us and it makes me mad I admit. Again, nicely written poem, but to me, bad subject.

Read my work and read my thoughts
I'll go back into the night now
---Night Angel

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

3 posted 2003-01-17 10:17 AM

I liked this, but it was hard to read. something's just didn't flow as nicely as they good. Otherwise....it was alright....see ya ~*~kirah~*~

*Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.*
~*~Love doesn't make the world go 'round, it just makes the ride worthwhile~*~

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

4 posted 2003-01-17 10:19 AM

PS...I agree with BrokenAngel.....Good luck!!!

*Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.*
~*~Love doesn't make the world go 'round, it just makes the ride worthwhile~*~

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