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0 posted 2003-01-15 01:30 AM


Often hidden, often not
everything to some, but
for others, sheer boredom.
Use your hands, if you like
the mind of a little tike.
Any way, shape, form,
use it! use it! use it!
Come, now! What is this?

Stepping back? From me?
Why must you be so?
Trying to steer your thoughts
to what you're seeking.
Don't you see? I'm your key.

What is it? Can you guess?
A pathway to power,
a fall from grace, so swift.
What does it leave? Seen.
What does it take? Unforeseen.

A charade of lies and passions,
of weakness and strength,
need and want
greed
or hate.

Every day, all around,
only you know you are blind.

Or not.

Speak.

© Copyright 2003 Daniel Redding - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-01-18 12:50 PM



Still thinking about this one, Ti.
Just wanted you to know that I hadn't forgotten.

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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2 posted 2003-01-18 01:01 AM


wow ti that one was awesome!!!! i love your style!
robin

you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all

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3 posted 2003-01-18 01:09 AM


Thanks, Vicky, for the update.

Robin, what do you think it is?

~Titus

"A life unexamined is not worth living."
                       -Socrates

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4 posted 2003-01-22 04:39 PM


Truth?  
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5 posted 2003-01-23 07:30 PM


I don't like guessing games so I'm not participating in the charade.

It was pretty good though. Interesting.

- Jaime

Shiva went on break now look at how much it's gonna take to make this place a space where we can breathe.

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6 posted 2003-01-23 07:39 PM


I soo can't figure that one out. Wait it'll come to me, I hope.

WinterWren
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7 posted 2003-01-23 10:22 PM


Hey!! I really liked this one! It was a most injoyable(sp??) read! I actually sat here and tried to figure it out I love that this poem really makes me think. I came up with innocence or the mind. Am I right?? Tell me what the right answer is!! Very well done!

Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love)
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8 posted 2003-01-24 06:52 AM


I'm going with manipulation. A few of the lines stood out in regards to that guess that I really can't be bothered bringing up but yeah - interesting piece, Ti.

Tell us what it is.

~AF~

"Write something, even if it's just a suicide note." -- Gore Vidal

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9 posted 2003-01-24 08:38 PM


Everyone, big props for your comments. Thank you.

Umm... is this when I'm supposed to say what it is?

~Titus

Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
                 --Aldous Huxley

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10 posted 2003-01-24 09:19 PM


this poem was great. just like the last one of yours i read. very interesting. it kept my attention throughout.
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11 posted 2003-01-25 03:42 PM


Yeah, you should probably tell us now.

WinterWren
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12 posted 2003-01-26 09:13 PM


Pain.
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13 posted 2003-01-31 10:35 PM


PoetryIsLife,

Or, Titus? Not sure I would have guessed that.... good write, poet. Good write. Get's you to thinking.

E

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