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Perfection |
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lil cherry Member
since 2002-10-02
Posts 86Ont, Can. 
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Just open your mouth Help protect Do more Experience more Reach for the top Never rock or tilt Perfection Somewhere down there is your soul Discover your passion It’s on the road less traveled Challenge yourself You’ll be amazed Preserve the doors of opportunity Experience the beyond the ordinary Preserve what we have Just open your mouth Sharpen your mind One sky is over all Lost and found perfection |
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lil cherry Member
since 2002-10-02
Posts 86Ont, Can. |
please guys i really want to hear your opinions on this one. ~~*lil cherry*~~ |
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foreverwithyou Member
since 2002-10-20
Posts 204Wonderland |
this was alright i cant say that itz my fave after i have read some of your more recent ones but this had a good message in it nice job. CATHY "I am who I am who I am who am I?" |
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Riley 
since 2002-07-18
Posts 1038in the pouring rain |
Ok, lets see here, I am going to try and give an honest opinion here, so um....I loved the message, let me tell you right now, it was good. This reminded me of something I wrote that I tried to get the message across with all these great lines, but none of the lines tied together. I liked your first stanza a lot, but the last line of the poem was a little weird. Isn't over all overall, I dunno, maybe I just can't spell. But at any rate pretty good poem. Riley  Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you...... |
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