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Teen Poetry #6

snow in neverland

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

0 posted 2003-01-13 05:11 PM

stains on the glass rimmed with frost
ice hangs from my words against the steel
it seems as blue as a pale oceans
contrasting against the tones
tones of silence andd torture turned against
but my love will come back to my breath
sweet melodys aren't enough to bring it's soul
if only a wish could give upon a star
would i have as much as i wish
no
moon beams give away my identity
to the more foolish of sorts that can't understand
but life shall know, for i told it secrets
in my mind, acting as diaries of lines
that couldn't care more or less what i think
kind of like people i know
or know me
blood drips down the black walls
life falls back into its order once again

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

EleanorMoonbaby
Member

since 2002-09-02

Posts 202
England, UK

1 posted 2003-01-14 06:13 PM

As usual, a great poem with lots of very vivid imagery. I always like the idea of the contrast between red blood and white snow. And black ebony. OK, maybe I've seen "Snow White: A Tale Of Terror" one too many times (it's the gothic horror version with Sigourney Weaver). Anyhoo, nice write. Liked the description.
Ellie

"I'm terribly sorry ma'am, my karma just ran over your dogma"

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

2 posted 2003-01-15 06:26 PM

Hi Riley Good to see you posting again.

I think I'll be reading this one a few more times,
in hopes of grasping the full meaning.
Lots to digest...but I like it.
I agree that the imagery is wonderful as always.
Nice job on this.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (01-15-2003 06:27 PM).]

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