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*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

0 posted 2003-01-12 12:26 PM

Holding out...on what she's holding in
she lays her head down on his shoulder
Feels that it is growing colder
She cries out softly for all shes been denied
Truth, is what she's never heard of
You're still young, so wipe your tears
Close your eyes, erase your fears

Now his bed is cold without you
He says his bed is big without you
Can't find the words to take away the pain
Apologies spoken...All made in vain
Pick up your head, accept the space
Before lines spread across that pretty face
Lock that love up deep inside
Your heart shaped box where you confide

Next time she sees him standing there
Faint smile lingers on her lips, so bare
Oh how she loved him,
how he tore her world apart
And now he wants her back
cause she still has his heart
...Shivers down his spine, she sends
For now he's on the recieving end...

And before its to late..to late for tomorrows
He grabs her hand and wispers
With shamefull sorrow,
"It's so cold in my world
won't you come on in?
Forget the past and share with me again...
With your gorgeous smile and sunshine ways
wipe away my rainy days...
Cause my world is so big
And I'm so cold without you."

Well what does everyone think?

Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love)
~Bella~

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2003-01-12 01:16 AM

It lives up to all that I've come to expect from you. It is a very good poem, I enjoyed it. I especially like the line, "She cries out softly for all she's been denied." Good story in this poem, well done!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

jeffwillett
Member

since 2003-01-04

Posts 86
Texas, US

2 posted 2003-01-12 01:42 PM

Yet another nice poem...good job

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

3 posted 2003-01-12 08:40 PM

Thanks guys, for the replies. I'm not sure why but I've been writing differently as of late, but I'm glad that you like it.

Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love)
~Bella~

Manth88
Junior Member

since 2003-06-15

Posts 45
IL, USA

4 posted 2003-06-18 02:59 AM

Hey thanx for the advice on my poem, and i really liked your poem. Dont Stop Writing!!!

!^*Manth88*^!

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

5 posted 2003-06-19 06:22 PM

wow...what i've been missing while i've been gone. this is amazing, all I have read from you has been. looks like i have a new favorite poet around here

keep up the great work

XoXo's ~ Kiley

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

Song_for_Serenity
Member

since 2003-05-28

Posts 97
USA

6 posted 2003-06-20 03:06 PM

Heh... and you call this a writer's block? Great poem, Bella. Interesting style. Have a spiffy day!
~Angela

blueyedlioness
Member

since 2003-04-24

Posts 289
USA

7 posted 2003-06-20 09:56 PM

I am *not* going to cry again. I am *not* I am *not* I am *not*...

Wonderful, girl. Simply amazing. Every poem I read from you seems to be better than the last.

-Lioness

rapturedmist
Junior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 30
USA

8 posted 2003-06-23 02:16 AM

Heh and you think that I'm a better writer then you...it was great ---> Sorry I can't think of anything useful to write here.

teenpoet
Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

9 posted 2003-06-23 03:02 PM

Perfectly wonderful and heartfelt. I think I've been missing a lot these last coupple weeks. 'Sides it's a really great poem. Keep it up and if this is what you call writer's block....Lord Almighty.

I don't know if today is a good day, or if yesterday was, or if tomorrow will be, but I'd like to think so.

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

10 posted 2003-06-23 07:41 PM

I don't think I remembered to put this in my library the first time I read it,Im glad it's up again so I can do that now.
I Loved it just as much on the second read.

WinterWren
Just because someone doesn't love you the way you want them to, doesn't mean they don't love you with all they have.

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

11 posted 2003-06-24 12:39 PM

It's Back!! Jeez someone keeps pulling these evil things out of the archives!! heh..thanks for the replies guys and for those of you who thought it was a writers block cause you probably read it right after Tourtured soul, this was actually one of the first I'de ever written in here..RM Yay!! I so just figured out who you are GO ME!!!
~Live and Laugh~

Don't look to me for perfection, for I will surely let you down.
~Bella~

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