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aries_luv_ppl
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0 posted 2003-01-11 10:34 PM


Yesterday a Cold

Vivian So aka. Eliza Simmons
(c) July 25, 2002

Yesterday a cold,
Today I'm healed.
If only all pain
Come and go like a sneeze-
Morning wind brings solace-
Sunset is more... AMAZING.

Yesterday...
A cold passed by...
Today I...
I look back and...
And I...
Don't feel sorry... for yesterday.
I look at it...
With a comfort... in my heart...

Yesterday a cold,
Today I'm healed.
If only all pain
Come and go like a sneeze-
Morning wind brings solace-
Sunset is more... AMAZING.

Yesterday a cold,
A cold I... forget...
Yesterday...
I learned that...
A cold is a past.

Eliza Simmons

Maybe I am not praying...but I know...
You are always listening...to my soul...

© Copyright 2003 Eliza Simmons - All Rights Reserved
WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
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1 posted 2003-01-11 10:37 PM


That was really different, but I liked it alot! It was truly very good. Is that somewhat supposed to be like a song or does it just repeat? In any case, excellent write!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

aries_luv_ppl
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since 2001-09-20
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2 posted 2003-01-12 12:17 PM


usually I hum along when I write...like songs that we hear...and I kinda pick out part of the song and repeat the melody as I write...so I don't know. It doesn't have a tune...cuz I don't know how to write music.

Maybe I am not praying...but I know...
You are always listening...to my soul...

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...
3 posted 2003-01-15 02:38 AM



Vivian~
I enjoyed reading this.
Very unique inspiration you had here.
Nicely done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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