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WindSong
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since 2002-12-23
Posts 313
Long Island, New York

0 posted 2003-01-11 08:47 PM


Another church writing. Last Sunday, I wrote two. Here's the second one. I dunno what I was thinking...I don't even remember what I wrote...here goes nothing....
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Do I make the move?
Do I just here waiting for nothing?
I wonder what really happened.
I wonder if it will ever be the same.
I don't know what to say.  
I don't know what to do.
But nothing that I do makes a difference.
It's like I'm not even there.
You don't see me.
I'm invisible.
Tell me what to do.
Tell me when you see me.
But by then, it's too late.
I'm already gone.
I've disappeared.

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I don't think I'm going to keep this one up. But just tell me what you think...I dunno, it's a weird one, but you know what? I don't care! I'm an odd ball! hehe!

*Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.*
~*~Love doesn't make the world go 'round, it just makes the ride worthwhile~*~

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WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044
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1 posted 2003-01-11 09:47 PM


I have to say I didn't like this one as much as your other ones I've read. It was good, but not your best. Course not everything CAN be your best. Keep Writing!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

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