Understanding - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Teen Poetry #6

Understanding

HeroicVillan
Junior Member

since 2002-11-09

Posts 34
Lost.....

0 posted 2003-01-09 08:04 PM

UNDERSTANDING

That pain inside,
so hard to hide.
Always misleading,
cant stop the bleeding.
Feeling deep down,
king without a crown.
Wolf without a pack,
nothing left to lack.
Everything is gone,
happiness was a con.

BabyHuey
New Member

since 2002-11-09

Posts 2

1 posted 2003-01-09 08:10 PM

Hmmm... i know the feeling, i liked it a lot.

jeffwillett
Member

since 2003-01-04

Posts 86
Texas, US

2 posted 2003-01-10 06:15 PM

Honestly i didn't like this one too much, the feeling was there though

PoeTik JusTice
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 186
California, USA

3 posted 2003-01-10 06:22 PM

I really liked this poem, something I could definitely relate to! My favorite lines were
"Feeling deep down,
king without a crown.
Wolf without a pack,
nothing left to lack."
I liked the comparisons. The one thing that struck me as obvious was the rhyming with gone and con, thats just me! I really loved it though! Good job!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
*~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn is to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

4 posted 2003-01-11 09:45 PM

I like this one, short but sweet. Good poem, and welcome to passions! I shoulda said that before, but I didn't see your first post.
Well done!

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.