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lil cherry
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0 posted 01-09-2003 12:58 PM       View Profile for lil cherry   Email lil cherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lil cherry

How can silence be this loud?
It penetrates into your very soul
Far away you can hear noise
But thatís all it is, so far away
Itís a dark hole just going on forever
Straining to hear just makes it seam further away
Panic creeps in as you realise
You have a half-hour to go
Boredom settles in the pit of your stomach
Waiting for you to mix it up to make to go away
The windows make the outside seem so inviting
Just wishing you could be there is painful
Again I hear voices far away
I long to be laughing with these people
The chair seems to get more uncomfortable the longer I sit there
I wish only to be out of this place
It tortures me to know the end is still so far away
Please take me away from this place
Take me away from this living nightmare
Make this painful silence leave my soul
Get me out of here

© Copyright 2003 Angel - All Rights Reserved
EleanorMoonbaby
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1 posted 01-10-2003 04:55 PM       View Profile for EleanorMoonbaby   Email EleanorMoonbaby   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit EleanorMoonbaby's Home Page   View IP for EleanorMoonbaby

Is this about an exam? Cuz I had a really nasty English Lit exam today on Tess of the d'Urbervilles, and it really puts a dampner on an otherwise nice day! Or is it about a really boring lesson? I'm guessing maybe it's to do with school anyways. Correct me if I'm wrong.
Ellie

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jeffwillett
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2 posted 01-10-2003 06:04 PM       View Profile for jeffwillett   Email jeffwillett   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jeffwillett

is this about being in the hospital or something along those lines?
lil cherry
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3 posted 01-11-2003 01:41 PM       View Profile for lil cherry   Email lil cherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lil cherry

EleanorMoonbaby your guesses were very close.  i wasn't sure if ppl would be able to understand this, but it's going very well so awesome.
vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...


4 posted 01-15-2003 12:48 AM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes


lil cherry~
I'm so glad to see someone responding to the
challenge and I hope to see lots more.
Now...for a guess..I'm thinking maybe study hall?  Am I close?
I'll be back, looking for an answer.
Thanks for participating in the challenge.
Great job!
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Riley
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5 posted 01-15-2003 08:39 AM       View Profile for Riley   Email Riley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Riley

I think school, cause that describes the boredom etc. very well. That was what clicked into my tiny brain!

Riley

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~KNIGHT44~
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6 posted 01-15-2003 01:22 PM       View Profile for ~KNIGHT44~   Email ~KNIGHT44~   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ~KNIGHT44~

I can totally relate because I am taking my semester exams this week! Especially today!!!
Good job and nice desription.

~Friends are angels who pick you up when your wings forget how to fly~

foreverwithyou
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7 posted 01-15-2003 04:37 PM       View Profile for foreverwithyou   Email foreverwithyou   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for foreverwithyou

hey this was good i thought that it might have something to do with school also nice job!

        cathy

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lil cherry
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8 posted 01-15-2003 05:21 PM       View Profile for lil cherry   Email lil cherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lil cherry

ooooh vlraynes so very incredibly close, you're all right it has somthing to do with schoool.  but note the fact that there are voices i'm longing to be with, so not everyone is involved, that's a hint right there.  thanks for reading!
~~*lil cherry*~~
vlraynes
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9 posted 01-15-2003 05:29 PM       View Profile for vlraynes   Email vlraynes   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit vlraynes's Home Page   View IP for vlraynes


Hmmm...could this, perhaps, be detention?
lil cherry
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10 posted 01-15-2003 06:00 PM       View Profile for lil cherry   Email lil cherry   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for lil cherry

that's it!!!!! it's a poem i wrote while i was bored out of my mind in a detention. good job!  hey guys please check out my poem perfection, no one has responded yet and i really want to know what ppl think of it, it's not my usual style.
~~*lil cherry*~~
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11 posted 01-22-2003 04:42 PM       View Profile for Local Parasite   Email Local Parasite   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Local Parasite's Home Page   View IP for Local Parasite

LOL... I was so proud that I came up with what this was about, and thought "I wonder if anyone else got it," so I read the replies... and I turned out to be wrong.

Death, detention, same difference.  

Parasite

"Faith" means the will to avoid knowing what is true.
~ Friedrich Wilhelm Nietzsche

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12 posted 01-22-2003 08:06 PM       View Profile for PoetryIsLife   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for PoetryIsLife

Jeff's, along with Parasite's answers/guess' are great, to me, they're close to what I would have guessed. Not sure if I would have thought of detention.

I love the poem.   My only thought is the last line takes away from the poem as a whole, because it doesn't seem as eloquent.

~Titus


Facts do not cease to exist because they are ignored.
                 --Aldous Huxley

[This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (01-22-2003 08:06 PM).]

Ephraim
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13 posted 01-22-2003 09:01 PM       View Profile for Ephraim   Email Ephraim   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Ephraim

Enjoyed. I'm not sure if I would have guessed detention myself... something similar, sure, but I doubt I would have realized your true secret.  

E

[This message has been edited by Ephraim (01-22-2003 09:01 PM).]

kissa~rachelle
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14 posted 05-07-2004 04:52 PM       View Profile for kissa~rachelle   Email kissa~rachelle   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for kissa~rachelle

I was thinking In school suspension. Cause of the voices out side, and being stuck in the chair all day... thats just what i thought.... I like this. Not knowing what the hell it is actually about for a while... ~lol~ I have done that with a poem i call 2 worlds..anyways.. awesome poem.. you hit the whole bored out of your mind thing realy well..

I want a relationship i can finally sink my teeth into.~ Alexander Sterling

 
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