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Song_for_Serenity
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since 2003-05-28
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0 posted 2003-07-05 02:02 PM


Mocking temptation
Held in deception's lair
Something so right
Turned radically unfair
Painted facade
Speak saccharine lies
Oh, how I loved you
When you taught me to fly.

Now enter the shadows
And fall into the abyss
But I take one more sip
From that poisonous kiss
Hate. Jealousy. Envy.
Didn't know I could feel.
Broken down, empty
The pain is so real.

Stolen moment reflection
I thought I was strong
Smug cheshire cat
You had to prove me wrong
I take a look in the mirror
At the me that you've made
Grieve empty soul
And watch myself
Fade...

~Angela
"Anything less than mad, passionate love is wasting your time...Life has too many mediocre things in it, love shouldn't be one of them..."

© Copyright 2003 Angela - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-07-05 02:19 PM


Oh please tell me this is just something you wrote and has nothing to do with something that has happened in your life recently, or there is going to be hell to pay to somebody!! On that note this was a very emotional driven piece of work..obviously if it got me all riled up..I like how you ended it too...just to fade away..perfect! my favorite lines I think are But I take one more sip From that poisonous kiss but I'm having some difficulties with that cause I really like the smug as a chesire cat..all of it well done though I love the images that were used.
~Live and Laugh~


The problem with resisting temptation is you never know if you'll get the chance again
~Bella~

[This message has been edited by *Belabebeautiful* (07-05-2003 02:22 PM).]

Song_for_Serenity
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since 2003-05-28
Posts 97
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2 posted 2003-07-05 03:04 PM


Hey Bella! No worries. Nothing bad has happened. I was just bored last night and I thought that I'd just throw down some words. It eventually turned out like this. Thanks for the concern tho. Anyhoo, you all have a spiffy day!

~Angela
"Anything less than mad, passionate love is wasting your time...Life has too many mediocre things in it, love shouldn't be one of them..."

blueyedlioness
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since 2003-04-24
Posts 289
USA
3 posted 2003-07-05 03:46 PM


First, thankyou for the kind replies to my poetry.

This is beautiful... another one of yours to go into my library.

-Lioness

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