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Burning Desires
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Burning Desires |
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mindy Junior Member
since 2002-12-18
Posts 34VA, US |
He caressed the sounds of my heart with his eyes. He knew exactly what was in my mind. He knew how to grasp my attention. His eyes spoke every one of his intentions. He saw straight through me, seeing my desires. I could not resist it...I smelt the heat of his fire, The one that had been burning ever since he left. And now my heart tastes his depth. This taste, so familiar and sweet. Should I get a taste or give in to the heat? |
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Darkness Member
since 2002-10-17
Posts 202The place just beyond my eyes, where my spirit flies. |
This is really good. This is a very true interpretation of how passion and lust can break a person down(not always a bad thing) I liked it a lot. Darkness |
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devinechild22 Senior Member
since 2002-08-28
Posts 571 |
I liked this a lot. You have a great style of writing and I enjoy it a lot. Keep it up. *Allison* "O My love |
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Jaime
Registered
MemberPosts 250 |
Story of my life.. Bless you for keeping it short and thank you for the truth in this. (I have a difficult time focusing on "long" poems so I like short gems.) Good poem.  - Jaime And she said, I thought I'd never see me again. |
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Spine Grinder Senior Member
since 2000-10-28
Posts 1127Standing In Silence... |
loved it. great job.  If You Wanna See A Rainbow, You've Gotta Live Through The Rain. And If You Wanna See Through Love, You've Gotta Live Through The Pain. |
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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Generally, I don't like replys like this, but all I truly have to say is, it was enjoyed, and, like Jaime said, a splendid length. My only question is: does the ending repeat itself, or did I misread the poem? ~Titus "A life unexamined is not worth living." |
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