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Teen Poetry #6

Death of the Heart

Knight of Arendia
New Member

since 2003-01-07

Posts 3

0 posted 2003-01-07 10:22 AM

I said I hated you
That I never wanted to see you again
I wanted you to disappear
But I never wanted this

I was angry and misinformed
I didn't mean the words I said
I guess you knew all along
'Cuz you came back to me

But before our happily ever after
Even before we could give it a try
You're leaving me again
This time with a one-way ticket

Fight, please!
Please don't leave me here alone!
I can't go on without you!
Don't close your eyes!

-the Knight of Arendia-

WinterWren
Senior Member

since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2003-01-07 11:31 AM

That was a very good first post, and welcome to passions! But I think you could have added alittle more at the end in my personal opinion. Well done though.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

2 posted 2003-01-07 08:17 PM

Good poem. You have an original style, or at least in the ones that I've read. You express emotions well.

-Stinky Twinkie-

Susie
Junior Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 36
Illinois

3 posted 2003-01-08 08:16 AM

that was a really good poem and thanx 4 ur reply 2 mine!

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