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Taurus42285
New Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 7

0 posted 2003-01-07 10:12 AM

The one 4 me

U must have tipped over my bottle cause u got me spilling my guts
Stuck by my side even when I was trippin and stuff
And I appreciate u for it every single second
U belong in my heart under the category special
I love ur look, ur touch, ur voice, ur smile
Ur lips, ur nose ur teeth and ur eyebrows
My number 1 mission is to make u a happy lady
Everything about u completely fascinates me
I love u cause there just aint no pretending with u
U're my honey and I want u like Winnie the Pooh
We get along perfect plus all of our friends is cool
I hope we last forever cause nobody can fill in ur shoes
Bust through obstacles and petty trust issues
I got my whole life ahead of me and I wanna spend it with u
I was on cloud nine but now my thinking is clearer
I know I'm young but I think I'm ready to put that ring on ur finger.

roxywrestlegirl04
Member

since 2002-10-29

Posts 74
good ole DINWIDDIE

1 posted 2003-01-07 10:14 AM

GOOD JOB!!! you did a good job with this yesterday!! KEEP IT UP!!

LIZ

live,love,and die...but take RISKS..thatz what makes life worth the living, love worth the heartache,and death the new beginning!

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

2 posted 2003-01-07 10:15 AM

this was pretty darn good. It was better when you read it to us in class though. Word up yo!

-Stinky Twinkie iz from da streetz cuz-

rxyfxy04
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 54
lil' town in Virginia

3 posted 2003-01-07 10:17 AM

awwww.. that was so sweet.. u know we all LOVE ur work.. especially when you recite em.. keep it up.. u really have a talent that you could go somewhere with! .. i really like the last line when it mentions "i know im young" cause i hate it when older people think that us young kids cant love..cause we definitly can!!! keep it up..

RxyFxy04

stephanie
Junior Member

since 2002-11-15

Posts 33

4 posted 2003-01-07 10:18 AM

you already know that we all love this one!...we told you yesterday in class...you've got such an awesome talent and i hope you keep it up! Im gonna miss listening to your writing when the semester is over...so keep posting that way i can keep reading. GREAT JOB! Crystal

mara
New Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 4

5 posted 2003-01-07 10:26 AM

I am just speechless about this one. I really like it, it's one of my favorites. Well really i like all yo stuff!

PoeTik JusTice
Member

since 2003-01-05

Posts 186
California, USA

6 posted 2003-01-07 01:07 PM

Awww...that's so cute! Good work!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
*~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn is to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

7 posted 2003-01-15 04:02 AM

Taurus42285~
I really enjoyed reading this and it put
a big smile on my face.
You've put a lot of heart into this piece and it shows.
You've got some excellent lines in here as well.
For example...

"U must have tipped over my bottle cause
u got me spilling my guts"

I absolutely love that...very creative and
definitely my favorite line.
Very nice job on this.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes
[This message has been edited by vlraynes (01-15-2003 04:03 AM).]

Susie
Junior Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 36
Illinois

8 posted 2003-01-15 08:40 AM

AWWW!!!That was adorable!i wish sum1 would write me a poem like that!i LOVED it!u put sum goood feeling into it!!it's definitly goin 2 my library!

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