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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
hide me inside of you. shelter me, be my refuge. clothe me in your love, and I will endure, but for now, this moment, I am weak, lonely… so hide me inside of you I finally managed to squeeze something out of my muse. Hopefully it isn't too horrible.  Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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PoetryIsLife 
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
 I know what it's like to have a muse on the run, and with that in mind, I thought this piece was great. It may nto be your best, but I still can see what you were trying to show/tell us, the feeling's behind it. ~Titus "A life unexamined is not worth living." |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
*grin* Thanks!  I'm so hyper I'm bouncing off the walls. Watch!*run, hit, slide down* ow... ok, I'm not quite bouncing yet... maybe I should run faster? Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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PoeTik JusTice Member
since 2003-01-05
Posts 186California, USA |
I really liked that. Nice work XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nice work K.... sometimes we feel that way..vulnerable and just need a place to hide...to be safe. |
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Allysa
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Kielo, remember that thing we were working on a while ago? I think we were writing a poem together and I found it in my email folder and I was wondering if you wanted to finish it. So just tell me if you wish to finish it. Great poem by the way. |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
*grin* Yah, sure. I can't even remember what it was about... lol... Email it to me at my new address: kielo@hehe.com Thanks all. Ron, yes, and I more often than I like to admit. Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
This is absoloutely wonderful, this is a poem of true beauty, very simple at a first glance but full of emotion and meaning as you read it again, I like the repetition at the end, quite often it can add so little to a poem but in this instance it makes for a very powerful ending. Thank you for the read, I really enjoyed it Andrew |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
 I didn't think it was that good. Thanks. It means a lot to me.Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
*buries her head* I can't believe I didnt reply to this. *smooches* As you usually do, you've written a poem that is far better than what you think, my dear. You may like it, but it's three thousand times better than you think it is. I'm being serious, too hon. *hugs and smooches* Gotta run, class is soon  |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
I know you. YOU just like to make me blush.  Thanks... You ought to listen to yourself once in a while, dear. The whole mirror thing. *smooches* Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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anya Member
since 2002-07-27
Posts 393London, UK |
just to say i enjoyed this poem very much, elegant and touching in its simplicity, if that makes any sense anya |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
You people ae fun to watch. So interesting... ~Titus PS I have to go work for the day, and then I have plans tonight; after that, I'll send you my thoughts on your paper. "A life unexamined is not worth living." -Socrates [This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (01-10-2003 12:37 PM).] |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
anya, it makes perfect sense. Thank you very much. Titus... I'm so honoured. And about the paper, don't feel obligated, but I would be honoured. ... yet again. lolKielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
oooh, Nicely done Kielo, I loved the ending. It was short, but effective. Tell that muse of yours to visit you more often- maybe you could bribe it by giving it some food or shoes, perhaps? Nice write K, write some more now |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
This was a very beautiful wonderfully done piece! I love it! By the way, if you jump off something first and then run faster it helps to bounce off the walls.  WinterWren |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
cherish, you have no idea how much I value your opinion. Thank you.Winter Wren, thank you. I'll have to try that. Let me get my hard hat first. (Yes, I do have one. I wear it to school). Kielo I know only one thing, and that thing is that I know nothing. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Kielo~ I love this piece. You've expressed this very well and the emotions come through loud and clear. Hmmm...me thinks me needs to read more from you. ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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