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Allysa
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In an upside-down garden

0 posted 2003-01-06 11:43 AM


Her tongue is in knots
like a broken slinky
inflating with the attempts
she makes at portraying the truth.
Guitar chords escape
by way of her soul
every night when she dreams
that the stars are freezing over
and she walks on them.

He notices the rings on her fingers
twisted around pale flesh
keeping the secret scars
hidden, the hardest thing to hide
is her pain.
Spirals of silver and skin
purple nail polished stubs,
her oldest ring is cracked.
Familiarity and a sense of
knowledge seize him,
the cracked ring was his.

Twelve steps forward
eight steps back
she repeats her patterns
every night before she
closes her eyes and turns on the light
she whispers to him how she misses him
and softly touches her lips
to every silver ring.

She only remembers what
she chooses to allow herself
to think about, picturing how it is
without a memory of him,
she tried to wash them all away
but the familiarity washed her over
when she was swimming in the
ocean of blood, tears
and him.

It swallowed them both up,
carried them away to the clouds
where he looks for her
and she hides, whispering into the wind
that he is too good for her,
deserving of someone
not so cracked.  

In her memory, he is like
tomato soup.
Sweet, warm and wonderful.
Her weakest hours seem not so week
with him
she kisses the stars.
Mood ring on her finger
changes to purple
fades to black.
Ambition lies in a potato sack
covered with her tears.

Familiarity kidnapped her
while she was sleeping
his smell on her shirt
drove her to tears
and the person on the other end
of the phoneound her toes
just couldn't understand
as she twisted her rings
around and around on her hand.

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StellarChica
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since 2002-07-06
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floating down a river...
1 posted 2003-01-06 02:12 PM


Wow. This was awesome. I could really feel what was going on in the poem. This was just...super. Keep it up.

*~erin~*

"It's hard to look in the mirror these days when everyone has everything you'd rather be."-Saves The Day

PoeTik JusTice
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since 2003-01-05
Posts 186
California, USA
2 posted 2003-01-06 02:53 PM


This poem was really good, but so sad.  I hope that you feel better.  I just have to say my favorite line would be..
"Twelve steps forward
eight steps back"  
  I don't know why, I just really really like it! Nice work.

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
     *~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn is to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01
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...Coming to
3 posted 2003-01-06 06:21 PM


Was that your addition to promises? It was also very good! I like your style of writing.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change?" -Dishwalla-

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25
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Somewhere... out there...
4 posted 2003-01-11 07:53 PM



Allysa~
I really enjoy reading your work and this
is no exception.  You poetry seems to always
have a very 'soft' quality about it and the
voice behind the words practically whispers.
Another beautiful write, Alyssa...nicely done.
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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