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PoeTik JusTice
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0 posted 2003-01-05 10:51 PM


I've been watching you from afar
Your eyes met mine like a shooting star
We fell into the midst of an endless night
Now our hearts begin to take flight
Our love becomes a burning ember
We must make this night something to remember

So give me your hand
Let our love get lost in the sand
Let's start this midnight masquerade
Share this night as the moon begins to fade

Now I lay here dreading the words good bye
If we let this go, my heart will forever cry
As you kiss me farewell
My words come out of their shell
"We can't end such beauty so soon
We must make this special under the moon"

So give me your hand
Let our love get lost in the sand
Let's start this midnight masquerade
Share this night as the moon begins to fade

As the dragonflies light your face
I realize to give you up would be a disgrace
Every moment seems captured in the waves
Our love is something the ocean craves
Let's lay in this warm sand forever and always
Never let our love be measured by the days


© Copyright 2003 Serena Marie Corbella - All Rights Reserved
*Belabebeautiful*
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1 posted 2003-01-06 12:00 PM


wow! The words in this are beautiful! They paint the most enchanting picture in my mind! I really like this poem It put me under a spell and I love your name as a small side note very clever!

Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love)
~Bella~

PoeTik JusTice
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since 2003-01-05
Posts 186
California, USA
2 posted 2003-01-06 04:40 AM


Thank you for the nice comments! I don't really know how I got my name, it just...came to me!

XoXo Love Alwayz XoXo
     *~Serena~*
"The greatest thing you'll ever learn is to love, and be loved in return." --Moulin Rouge

OtherSideOfTheMirror
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since 2002-12-19
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3 posted 2003-01-06 07:55 AM


"So give me your hand
Let our love get lost in the sand
Let's start this midnight masquerade
Share this night as the moon begins to fade"

Oh my... you have great talent. Some of the rhymes seemed a bit forced... but it was beautiful writing so I can't really be sure. It's really quite good... can't wait to read more from ya!

vlraynes
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4 posted 2003-01-11 07:26 PM



PoeTik JusTice~
This is a beautiful piece and a wonderful
entrance into the Passions forums.
I very much enjoyed reading this and I hope
to see lots more from you.
Welcome!
~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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