Realization of my true love

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ShadyMakaveli
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since 2002-08-21

Posts 128

0 posted 2003-01-04 03:52 AM

How could I have been so blind
With my feelings i'm unaware
To my heart I must be fair
Steady thoughts of you in my mind

Knowing the truth scares me
Never thought of you in this way
Passionate feelings I wish to say
Can only offer this romantic plea

I don't want to lose you
You must be the one for me
I can feel we're meant to be
I wanna know how you feel too

Am I on a one sided street
My feelings not being shared
I could have sworn you cared
Without you my heart can't beat

So when I'm ready, I'll take your hand
I will look you in the eyes
Tell the truth, no need for lies
Wanna make you mine, hoping you understand

Smoothy
Member

since 2002-12-02

Posts 119
The dark side of the moon

1 posted 2003-01-04 08:23 AM

The best thing a poem can do is convey an emotion or feeling. This does exactly that so bravo.

Love conquers all, so I must be in a losing battle.

OtherSideOfTheMirror
Member

since 2002-12-19

Posts 245

2 posted 2003-01-04 03:14 PM

Nice write... difficult rhyme scheme though, I don't know that it fits with what you're saying for every line. Overall nicely written words.

dinky
Member

since 2002-10-19

Posts 258

3 posted 2003-01-04 03:28 PM

hey,
this was really good!
i luved it!!
it stinx when u cant tell some1 how u really feel
~samantha~

"sometimes i just feel like
quittin i still might
why do i put up this fight?
why do i still write?"

*Belabebeautiful*

Senior Member

since 2003-01-03

Posts 696
washington, USA

4 posted 2003-01-04 03:41 PM

I really like the poem I can feel you and that's awsome in poetry if you can make the writer feel what you are feeling. And let me tell you I can feel your pain I been there too, sucks don't it? Keep writing and always remember to live and love

Live and laugh and make sure to always have Bella Amor (beautiful love)
~Bella~

HopelessRomanticGuy
Member

since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

5 posted 2003-01-04 11:10 PM

This is great! A wonderful write. I'm going through something like that.. but I KNOW I'm on a one-sided street, but I'm either too strong or stupid to give up hope, yet to weak to move on, so I'm rather stuck. Just make sure the same dosen't become of you!
*~Rich~*

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

WindSong
Member

since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

6 posted 2003-01-05 12:56 PM

Wowsers. I loved it. I can relate to this. Seriously, it was great. I actually kind of sort of have a problem and this poem describes it quite well. A little to well actually. But, great job. I loved it. ~*~Me~*~

*Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.*
~*~Love doesn't make the world go 'round, it just makes the ride worthwhile~*~

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